Unfit

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    Unfit

    Unfit as a daughter.

    What do you want from me?

    Unfit as a lover.

    What have I done?

    Unfit as a friend.

    Where is the line drawn?

    Unfit as a child of God.

    Why am I forsaken?


    Why am I unfit? When I have done nothing but love unconditionally and try to be perfect, why am I tossed aside and deemed unworthy? All I am trying to do is make the pieces fit.

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    Kdaddy commented on Unfit

    08-30-2009

    Nice read a very unique style. I appreciate you sharing.
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    optimistic commented on Unfit

    07-28-2009

    This was outstanding a word of thought to me as well so truly pieced together great thought and the way the words fade to the end are unique great write.
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    poet4ever101995 commented on Unfit

    07-27-2009

    i really like this poem.. especially the first part it is very good!!!!! i know im not really in a position to say this but.. you should always love yourself you are a good writer never doubt yourself
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    WinterFrost commented on Unfit

    07-27-2009

    I like it especially the 1st half which I believe would stand on its own. as well Everyone tries to make the pieces fit... I find scissors and a big hammer work the best.
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    cliftondurant commented on Unfit

    07-27-2009

    You are not unfit be proud of yourself and always do your best hold your head high and reach for the sky good poem
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    If I feel physically as if the top of my head were taken off, I know that is poetry.

    Emily Dickinson (1830-1886) American poet.

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