Unholy Among the Holy

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    Unholy Among the Holy

    My Sundays are filled with dread...

    as off I go to pay homage to the dead...

    I sit in the wooden pews...

    praying that my every sin I will lose...

    I feel rather uncomfortable here...

    as I catch the gaze of all my peers...

    they look at me with disdain...

    little do they realize my pain...

    I am not a pious man that's for sure...

    yet every Sunday I go and endure...

    the preaching and the praying...

    hoping that God's word will keep me from straying...

    I realize my soul is lost...

    my heart has been covered with Hell's frost...

    still I go hoping that God's word...

    will reach my daughter and keep her forever cured...

    this fate I wish upon no mortal...

    so laugh, snicker and chortle...

    as I kneel before your God...

    thinking that all this is rather odd...

    pray for me not, my soul is black...

    I left for Hell's eternity a good while back...

    I am unredeemable, can't you see...

    this is the face beneath my mask, this is me...

    I remain to be a hollow example for her to see...

    she is all that matters anymore to me...

    if there is only one prayer He hears...

    save her from all of my fears...

    keep her in His warmth and light...

    make sure she does what is right...

    forget about this dying, wicked man...

    as only a forgiving God can...

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    cousinsoren commented on Unholy Among the Holy

    06-10-2010

    This is a very poignant lament. In Biblical Scripture there was a sinner who overheard another man ( in Church) praying to God in the most eloquent language, He humbly said ,:Lord have mercy on me a sinner" Christ told his disciples that God heard the plea of the sinner and ignored the prayer of the eloquent man. ,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,LOL However, I am more interested in the perfect versification and tone of this poem, The craftmanship, ( rhyming scheme and regularity of metre, particular) ) is excellent,

    Dano commented on Unholy Among the Holy

    04-21-2010

    there is very strong message here... i have found myself in a similar situation with my own children... trying to allow them to make up thier own minds and not influencing them... while not compremising to much of my own sence of self... nicely written

    Poetry is either something that lives like fire inside you or else it is nothing, an empty formalized bore around which pedants can endlessly drone their notes and explanations.

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