Unsecured of what lies beyond the deep abyss,

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  • Gothic
    • selena
    • is trying not to drown in her own sorrow

    Unsecured of what lies beyond the deep abyss,
    Unsecured of what lies beyond the deep abyss,
    Unsecured of what dark secrets this kiss-
    hides,
    What if it's all lies,
    What you tell me,
    What you show me,
    Is it all real?
    Is your heart able to feel?
    Is it all true?
    Or am I left without a clue?
    Am I just a clueless fool?
    Or am I just your useless tool?
    What lies below the dark waters-
    I don't know,
    What lies inside your soul-
    is hard to know,
    A clue I'm missing,
    Your lips I'm kissing,
    With blind shut eyes,
    I cannot see what lies,
    I can't feel my self drowning in the waters,
    I wonder if it really matters,
    Drowning on your lies,
    Beyond the dark waters.

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    Doctorisin commented on Unsecured of what lies beyond the deep abyss,

    05-21-2010

    I love the structure, and I truly appreciate the not so implied questions of what happens if we make a presumption. Will we fall into the abyss even deeper? Your method of expression truly leaves the reader connected.. apart of all that it is, and could be...beautiful, strong, and to the emotional point.
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    WillCurl1 commented on Unsecured of what lies beyond the deep abyss,

    09-09-2009

    Very interesting Selena. It is truly hard to know how sincere someone is. Our emotions are often tormented until we know the truth and feel secure.
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    StraytRootz commented on Unsecured of what lies beyond the deep abyss,

    02-18-2009

    Wow. I can feel your hurt and confusion. Nice expression. The whole drowning thing is powerful.
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    jammieswife commented on Unsecured of what lies beyond the deep abyss,

    02-06-2009

    That really speaks to me Love it!
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    Phoenix9 commented on Unsecured of what lies beyond the deep abyss,

    02-06-2009

    very well done,
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    In science one tries to tell people, in such a way as to be understood by everyone, something that no one ever knew before. But in poetry, it's the exact opposite.

    Franz Kafka (1883-1924) Czech writer.

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