erasure

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    erasure

    erasing the lines
    to neutral
    coasting more often now
    from hilltop
    a downward, dotted vision
    toward soft surroundsight.

    clamoring against jagged stability,
    momentum upward tilting,
    thoughts windmilling your coreshield and
    tolling cares at each found booth.

    morse lines & dashes
    fading toward disconnect.

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    StandingBear commented on erasure

    11-26-2009

    A nice usage of ellipsis on display within your work. Nice!

    Lolee commented on erasure

    08-28-2009

    I will be honest with you. I don't understand this one...but that is probably because it is way over my head. I am a simple poet, and I prefer for people to get the point, not try to figure out the puzzle. That is the beauty of everyone being different. I know there are many people who would love to analyze this.

    tennessee commented on erasure

    03-10-2009

    Reading and rating anothers heart work strikes me as rather odd. This poem, wonderfully bitter sweet, discriptive, moving. I can tell you really cared...I find the disconnect hopeful in its finality.

    AdelKernan commented on erasure

    02-28-2009

    I love this. Conveys a sense of angst without being contrived and precious. The second stanza especially: "clamoring against jagged stability..." what a lovely line! I also like the air of abrupt finality that the morse code image lends to the finish.

    In science one tries to tell people, in such a way as to be understood by everyone, something that no one ever knew before. But in poetry, it's the exact opposite.

    Franz Kafka (1883-1924) Czech writer.

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