Heartborn Parasite
Away, even when I’m here
My heart drained of all its love
Soul gone and mind dying
Paltry body still remains.
I give, you take.
I love, you hate.
You stole my heart
And so my life
Slowly Becomes
Ever
More
Empty.
Heartborn Parasite
2 Comments
Poem Commentary
another thing just trying to get stuff off my chest. . .i know its not the best. . .help is goooood
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Gracey commented on Heartborn Parasite
10-19-2009
- You dont need help! this is perfect as it is....I love the style. "Ever More Empty." It makes you read them slowly so you can get a feel for how drained your sole is............that probably doesn't make sense LOL but this is good :) 10 from me (Y)
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cmlestrade commented on Heartborn Parasite
08-14-2009
- This was great, I read a similar poem a few minutes ago by another poet but this has what was lacking. This was loss sadness expressed with no mundane phrases and childish pettines. Great submission, keep them coming.
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