I can be Brave~

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    I feel like this often. I want you to know your not alone or if your one who assumes I might no be like you think. I wear all black people never ask why just make up reasons. I am not scary yet no one says hello. I want you to be brave do not be another clone!

    I can be Brave~

    I try so hard, to be different.

    But...now I find myslef only wanting to be normal,

    just for a day, I want the jokes to stop,

    the slander to stop... my pain to stop,

    if it even for only a day.

    I hear your words, there ment to kill,

    yet you say them softly. Freak, werido, vampire, goth.

    What did I do to earn such hate?

    I want to ask you questions, but you make crosses with your figers,

    try to ward me off, I am not a monster.

    I want to know why... you act like clones,

    make leaders, hurt your friends.

    I can not walk through the hall,

    with out you screaming after me, the name JESUS.

    What if I were christian or catholic?

    You would not really know.

    loner you mumble... I would not be a loner,

    if you asked me to be your friend.

    Yet I hold no hate for you, no words ment to kill.

    Now I remember, why I am okay with being different...

    My reasons are: I will never be a clone,

    kill you with my words, state asumptions, bring you pain,

    let you feel like your the only person different.

    Yet I get this feeling every once in a while,

    that I am the only one different!

    I learn to counter act myself and wisper,

    if I am the only one different...

    then I am the only one BRAVE!

     

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    orbits4 commented on I can be Brave~

    04-05-2011

    I loved this poem AlisRed...Especially the last 3 lines, they're so powerfull! I'm different too, and don't have a lot of real freinds, but I'm cool with it! I just thak the world for letting me shine, you know? I would like you to read another of poems titled "Trend setter"...Let me know what you think...Keep up the awesome work!
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    AlisRed

    04/06/2011

    Thank you very much!

    bets commented on I can be Brave~

    04-03-2011

    This is really amazing and I can totally relate. I love the way it's written and how you refer to them as clones, which in truth, they might say they aren't but they are. And I also love that you included how they hurt friends and make leaders. :) Bets
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    AlisRed

    04/04/2011

    Thank you. I an 15 and wall the halls and this is exactly my experience and how i feel about it.

    AlisRed

    04/05/2011

    walk*

    Sali commented on I can be Brave~

    03-28-2011

    This piece is very similiar to what I wrote...its based on the same concept...watch what you say and how you treat others. Well done! So you see, you are not too young to tell the truth. :)
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    AlisRed

    03/28/2011

    Thank you, This is completely based of of my days at school. I like to try and exceed expectations. thank you again

    EdSchmeltzer commented on I can be Brave~

    03-27-2011

    I can relate to this. I know that pain too. I was there when I was your age myself. You may not believe it, and you might not agree-just like I did-but it's gets better. It always does. As far as the poem goes great job. Very nice way to build it up to that final declaration of courage in the end. It's one big rising feeling that feeds on despair and confusion, yet somehow finds a way to top it all off with hope and a sense of security. It's relatable, and you're not alone. That connection is what makes great poetry.
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    AlisRed

    03/28/2011

    Thank you very much

    Loafer commented on I can be Brave~

    03-26-2011

    A very assertive piece, you're not alone, I have that feeling too.
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    Poetry is what is lost in translation.

    Robert Frost (1875-1963) American Poet.

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