New Puppies

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    just a memory from the past.

    New Puppies

     doldrum dog, effort drugged
    from earthquaking deliveries
    afterbirth nourished,yet
    languishes, pushed up against
    the wall by seven battering ram sucklers,
    irrepressible, blind mole-dogs

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    laydbak1 commented on New Puppies

    07-05-2009

    I love this one... Who has not witnessed this picture...??? You painted it very well...
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    linlee

    07/10/2009

    I was actually worried about putting this one up. It's not negative, but it's not my usual pretty words, either. However, it is a large part of my upbringing because we raised boxer dogs when I was growing up. I couldn't not write it eventually, small as it is. Thank you for reading so much of my work.

    wheelsal commented on New Puppies

    07-03-2009

    Out of the "battering ram" of new puppies. Interesting how nature does all this. Good write.............
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    wheelsal

    07/03/2009

    Just notice low ratings. I don't understand this. This to me is poetry. Not great but good. I will send you a private message.

    surealworld commented on New Puppies

    06-21-2009

    I like this poem very creative in your choice of words.
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    linlee

    06/26/2009

    Thank you for saying so, but is there something you didn't like, too? I notice that this poem is rated a 5. Someone(s) doesn't much like it. If there are things that could make it better, please don't be afraid to say what that is. I thrive on constructive criticism because I want to write better. Let me know what could make this better. linlee

    gkentonsmith commented on New Puppies

    06-20-2009

    and, forgive me for not saying it with my last comments, a poem with real images that you can think about & feel & see. well done
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    linlee

    07/03/2009

    Say, gkentonsmith, do you think you could take a minute or two and read my poem "Three Sides of Eternity" if you haven't already? It's a difficult style for me and I worked a lot on it. Now I need some feedback. Thank you ever so much if you can. And I thank you for your nice comment on this one, too.

    gkentonsmith commented on New Puppies

    06-20-2009

    At last, a poem not about I, me, my; a poem not about how I feel, & what I want, & who I am. A poem with real poetry in it! Thank you.
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    linlee

    06/26/2009

    Since you made two comments, I decided to answer after the second one. I am wondering if you rated this one. Your comment is very nice, yet this poem has a rating of 5. If you think there are things that I could do with this poem to make it stronger or more moving, don't spare me. I take my writing seriously enough to want truthful feedback. This one isn't my usual pretty nature stuff, but we raised pedigree boxer dogs when I was growing up, and this was a common enough sight back then. I decided to write it, as short as it is. I have another one that praises dogs, and another one about my love for puppies, kittens, and baby squirrels. So, if you have criticism, lay it on me. linlee

    The true philosopher and the true poet are one, and a beauty, which is truth, and a truth, which is beauty, is the aim of both.

    Ralph Waldo Emerson, American Poet (1803-1882)

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