The World In A Dream

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    This is the second poem I ever wrote. The first was in 4th grade for an english assignment, and was naturally lost. Something about a buttercup. Honest polite critiques are welcomed; please don't be too cruel, i was a kid. :)

    The World In A Dream

    I was surrounded by beauty

    when I was born

    in a beautiful garden,

    Like the Garden of Eden,

    on that glorious morn.

     

    As I grew older

    Oh, the things I would see.

    There were birds chirping,

    And flowers blooming,

    Always surrounding me.

     

    The older I grew

    the more places I would look,

    to find more interesting things

    So that in later years

    I might write a book.

     

    When I’m eighteen

    Oh, the stories I will write;

    Telling of the beautiful things I saw

    the very moment I woke up,

    at the sight of the beautiful

    morning light.

    ©1982 KMDavis-Scheuer (Age 10)

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    Poetry is either something that lives like fire inside you or else it is nothing, an empty formalized bore around which pedants can endlessly drone their notes and explanations.

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