Vague Fatality

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    Vague Fatality

     I see him there,
    elbows to his knees.
    Washing God's floor with the sacred
    fluid of his apologies.
    He is heard, but it's the empty what ifs 
    that haunt the answer, and as each atomic blast
    litters the pavement; he pictures his demons 
    being crushed bellow.
    If mercy were vindication he'd be a tortured
    soldier of fortune. Whimpering behind their abuse;
    portals where his child takes refuge.
    A banging, angry enemy lingers forever
    between two temples. Is it belief,
    or hatred?
    Freedom has no equal, but an entangled man,
    worships his pointless endeavor..

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    bforibus commented on Vague Fatality

    10-16-2009

    i love this poem because it should different aspects of different emotions. it seemed like it played around the non exsistence of hell or maybe its better to live your life to be a butler in heaven then a master in hell. either way the story telling of this poem is awesome and the control of the flow was great as well.
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    JeremyJoe commented on Vague Fatality

    09-23-2009

    I really enjoyed your poem. You have a writing style that draws in a persons attention. Thanks for the read.
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    MorganaLafey commented on Vague Fatality

    09-04-2009

    Lets see "Nietzche" said. "a casual stroll through a lunatic asylum show that faith does no prove anything". Something to think about. As for your poem you penned your agnst with very vivid imagery. Truely enjoyed this poem thanks for posting.
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    CdeM

    09/04/2009

    Thank you sooo much...

    Poetry is either something that lives like fire inside you or else it is nothing, an empty formalized bore around which pedants can endlessly drone their notes and explanations.

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