Only with you

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This poem is from the bottom of my heart, criticize the others, but please not this one, i just want to put it out there for others, I honestly think that its not even good enough to be called a poem, BUT I really don't want criticism on this one.plz.
love to you all
selena

Only with you

All of the people,

That I love 

Out of them all

I love you

 

My tears,

Won't stop

My fears

Are at the top

 

You are my heart

You are my soul

From the very start

You made me whole

 

Your arms.

My castle

Your kisses

They hold

 

Hug me so tight

It feels so right

Every night

My head so light

 

Your eyes,

My heaven

You really are

My Evan

 

Your voice

My lullaby

My heads really

Up in the sky

 

I need you

Here and now

I want you

Here somehow

 

Come closer 

My baby

Come closer

My dear

 

My heart is empty

My mind is blank

You my only remedy

Or I take the plank

 

Your just so tasty

I only want you

Your just so Yummy

What to do.

 

Too far away

Why am I here

I don't want to stay

Am I clear

 

I write for you

I cry for you

I really want you

I don't know what to do

 

I want to scream

I want to run

Why are they so mean?

There's no fun

 

I just want you

Plain and simple

I really want you

But I seem to be in a pickle

 

I don't have a car

But I want to see you

I don't have freedom

But I love you

 

There's no end

To my trouble

I'm left to fend

For myself in this rubble

 

I love you

I love you

I love you

I love you

 

In the dark i am

Missing you I am

In the dark i write

and Imagine your sight

 

I bring you down

And i don't want to

I make you frown

I really don't want to

 

I want to see

You smile that smile

I want to be

The one to make that smile

 

But I can't

I only make you cry

I can't

I only make you lose sleep

 

Over me,

Over stupid me

How can this be

Why can't i see

 

A solution 

To this

I do

Is it a kiss?

 

Or more dangerous?

Is it a fist?

Or even more dangerous?

But I want a kiss

 

I don't care

about me

I only care

About you

 

Please

Don't waste

Just release

 

Don't waste

Your money

Don't waste

Your time

 

I'm not worth it

I don't deserve it

The things you do for me

I really don't deserve it.

 

How can you 

Love me so much

How can you

Do so much

 

I can't do 

Anything

And soon

I won't be anything

 

My soul

Will shatter

My heart

Will burn

 

My body

Will break

My voice

Will shake

 

My mind 

Will go wild

My body 

Will die

 

I'll go insane

The tears

Will rain

With all my fears

 

I can't live

Without you

I can't live

Away from you

 

Its no use

Only you

Can save me

Only you

 

If there's no you

There's no me

Nothing you can do

Nothing I can see

 

I love you more

Than anyone

Can imagine

For me there's only one

 

Only you.

 

Selena


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JadedJezzabel commented on Only with you

06-27-2009

oh sweet heart i remember this feeling.....in a way i kind of miss having the caspasity to love this much.........this is a well written poem for a 14 year old girl you should really look into developing the natural raw talent you pocess. hang in there baby gurl......every thing has a way of working its way out in the end. what got me through the emotional ups and downs of being a teen was this one thought that my gma told me "litlle girl this too shall pass" and it always did.

dreamersangel

06/30/2009

Thank you soo much, and i appreciate your comments immensely. I took your comment to heart and not to worry, it will not go to waste

A poem begins as a lump in the throat, a sense of wrong, a homesickness, a lovesickness. It finds the thought and the thought finds the words.

Robert Frost (1875-1963) American Poet.

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