FORBIDDEN SUNSET

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     Too many times to count the nights?????

    FORBIDDEN SUNSET

     I awake at morning's breath
    My heart is sad and low
    Setting out into the world
    Not knowing where to go

    The sun now straight up in the sky
    Tears fall like drops of rain
    Pushing on to meet my goal
    Unable to end the pain

    The light now begins to fade
    My love not found yet
    Another lonely night ahead
    Another forbidden sunset

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    gogant commented on FORBIDDEN SUNSET

    10-15-2010

    Hey Sam, there's always tomorrow..........and the weather may be just a bit warmer.........put your snappy sunglasses on, and look on down the road, she is just up the road, and around the bend. A terrific short write by you..............................gogant
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    songmanpoet

    10/19/2010

    gogant. Thanks for your great comment. I was on the road tp Phoenix the day you sent this. First vacation since at least 2007? I found mine, but she's oversea's. 18 months and I believe we are soon to be together. Thank you for your comment. Morning, noon and night started each verse, my hook on the poem. Blessings,,,Sam. I'm not on here much, but as soon as I catch up from vacation I'll read some of yours. Me again,hehe.

    mamasan commented on FORBIDDEN SUNSET

    11-23-2009

    Ah Sam I've been following you around by reading your poetry which I really love reading aloud. I do wish you the kind of happiness your looking for but I have a good feeling it may be right in front of your nose.
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    katrinaLeAnn commented on FORBIDDEN SUNSET

    11-23-2009

    great work here...i have felt this way time and time again...thank you for sharing
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    songmanpoet

    11/23/2009

    Thank you very much and for the rating. I just received a letter from another contest, this is a finalist with a chance at $2500.00. Money will never take away memories, but it's great to have when needed. Be blessed and again thanks.

    In science one tries to tell people, in such a way as to be understood by everyone, something that no one ever knew before. But in poetry, it's the exact opposite.

    Franz Kafka (1883-1924) Czech writer.

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