"The Problem"

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This was a Poetry colab with SmleyAngel138 my friend for life. Please Leave comments to let us know what you think. Thanks and God Bless!

"The Problem"

SmileyAngel138
I used to wake up in the morning with your name on my brain
I loved the way you said my name
In my heart I knew that nothing would tear us apart
But the darkness came in
And you became cold
Once the light of my life, you became like a black cloud

Squadbuddy954
Waking up sending a sweet text message to start your day to be the first to place a smile on your face but you changed and said I was the one to blame because the attention becoming slack because I been working a lot these days made you think another girl was taking your place the calls stop coming the text messages got shorter all because I'm the one you blame when it was you who changed

SmileyAngel138
Days became weeks and weeks slowly started to turn into months
You say its work but I know its me
Your tired of my love
Working long hours
Saying your doing this for us
But your pushing me away

Squadbuddy954
I can't push someone who willing to leave I admit I have a problem showing affection but you act as if I don't care when I really do I work hard look good and smell good just for you when I'm out I represent us not just me. But your only concern is me and you til you blind with life it self not willing to deal with a problem instead you ready to walk away and have me replaced

SmileyAngel138
As much as I hate the fact that your not here I can't be without you
Your my love
My joy
My man
Even with the endless nights
The late night phone calls of just goodnight
I can't be without you
Baby please don't leave
Being selfish is just a flaw in me
But my love for you is more...

Squadbuddy954
If I was to leave what would I gain more heart aches and pain from misses the one who shows me love the most you are my better half full of strength, love, and a kind heart I can't let the selfishness pull us apart because I would be lost without you like I am today I pray things work out for the best and we can be str8 because I never want the love we have for each other to fade away

SmileyAngel138
With our love we will make it through
I love you with all that I am and I know you do too
We will make it work baby one day at a time
Because at the end of the day I am yours and you are mine

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GucciGurl commented on "The Problem"

02-12-2010

learned alot from this mistakes I made hoping one day in my life I can make the change to be what someone really needs. There are always to sides to a story but I think it was well said . Keeps them boucing withing my head. Knowing where u go wrong is where u begin to make the next one right

mcelvain commented on "The Problem"

12-27-2009

i like this alot. it open my eyes a little more about forgotten but this is a good look at both sides of the story.

squadbuddy954

12/28/2009

thanks glad you like it alot

squadbuddy954

12/28/2009

thanks glad you like it a lot

Teardrops commented on "The Problem"

12-03-2009

you have found the key talking it out and making it work nice poem thanks for letting me read it

squadbuddy954

12/04/2009

Thanks and Thank you for taking time out to read it

If I feel physically as if the top of my head were taken off, I know that is poetry.

Emily Dickinson (1830-1886) American poet.

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