RELICS OF MY LIFE

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    this poem has the sounds of an autobiography. wishful thinking don't you think?!

    RELICS OF MY LIFE

    …and when I die, I keep on living

    for sure someday I’ll go

    to be seen and heard by none no more

    but deeply I remain etched in memories different

    for pernicious deeds and yet some acts virtuous

    and round my last house shall line the feet

    and the sighs from above them

    shall blow puny breezes to dry my sweat

     

    some shall say ‘He lieth here, the sage

    one out of them all, standing out apart

    a go-getter, and indeed a good one.’

    Others in a façade shall a tear drop on me

    yet, in thought revel and reflect…

    ‘there goes the ass, the drone, the wimp

    one with heart full of ire’

    and yet these ones shall a tear drop on me

    Some shall say still who knew me not

    ‘there goes a smart lad, a good genie if there be one’

    they’ll laud and sing to me of praise if just to be among

    for to speak ill of the dead is ill placed

     

    of these all, which is more I know not

    not that for any I care

    as my life I live my way

    with thoughts of only me, myself and I;

    and then God

    the Globe they say is of much more water than earth

    enough for all to swim if they feel I err

    but when I go, I’ll keep on living

    and that’s why, this I fashion

    as a memoir for those who care to reflect

    I know I’ll go, so set I am, prepared

    but alas, my soul to take by self I cannot

    my soul is willing but the flesh is weak

    the flesh which house my soul is unwilling to release yet

    that’s why I fret when I think he comes; my last caller

    but I know when at last he comes, the I inside of me

    shall revel in ascending, for behind

    I know I leave relics of my life the way I lived

     

    so this I say ere I leave;

    when my exeunt shall come after my part is played

    let no man a tear drop for me on me

    for they come forth not genuine

    like that of the swimming carnivorous log

    let my passing be of an epistle to be read by all

    to follow as a beacon in the deep dark wood called life

    tell those yet to come how my life I lived

    a niche I did carve from a stoic stubbornness

    minding not the thoughts of man save

    for me, myself and I, and Him who made me so.

     

    so this again I say ere I leave

    when my bow I shall take for my curtain call the last

    let it be ushered with ovation for the protagonist

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    Oblaidon commented on RELICS OF MY LIFE

    05-27-2010

    We all wonder what they say after we have passed. The legacy we leave will only tell. :)

    vincenzo

    06/08/2010

    yeah, our legacy will tell, and that's why we keep scribbling furiously... to leave the legacy... thanks for reading... Vin

    MootPoint commented on RELICS OF MY LIFE

    05-27-2010

    I like your style. The flow is nice and very poetic. I will send you a message on the rest. :)

    CongoNetherland commented on RELICS OF MY LIFE

    03-03-2010

    I feel very much that what we write is like a coral we leave behind. This poem seems to address that. I'll give you a standing ovation. Well done.

    mbryant53 commented on RELICS OF MY LIFE

    02-23-2010

    As others have said you have talent. True the flow of a poem makes it easier to absorb. Yours is full of images jumbled not flowing into each other. Powerful thoughts need stronger directions. I hope I have not offended you I only wish to help.

    CongoNetherland commented on RELICS OF MY LIFE

    07-01-2009

    A single heartfelt clap. This is a masterpiece. You are a master. I look forward to helping you. Words are not so easily manipulated. Let's talk, if you have the time. Your ability is obvious and appreciated.

    vincenzo

    09/12/2009

    hi pal, tanks for taking time to read my poems, i appreaciate it. i'v been off this site for a while, (I'm a tv director / producer) i've been working as a director on a tv reality show Project Fame West Africa. but i'm now full back on the site. i really wish to get to know you better too, you are master writer (no flatteries!) so your comments on my works sometimes scare me, lol! thanks all the same. if you're on Facebook, you can search for Akintijani Balogun. later

    Poetry comes nearer to vital truth than history.

    Plato (BC 427-BC 347) Greek philosopher.

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