I FOUND YOU

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A QUICK SET OF LINES DROPPED ON THE SPUR OF THE MOMENT....

I FOUND YOU

I FOUND YOU
When the road is smooth
The journey seems short
When the path is right
Distance diminish.
When the choice is right
The decision seems wise
When the thought flows smooth
Actions become bright.


I’ve been on the search
For years gone by
Looking into nooks 
Peeping into crannies
Ferreting all around
Rummaging and yet
Finding not what I seek… but,
When the road is smooth
The journey seems short
When the path is right
Distance diminish.


I’ve been waiting
All along for a lasting respite
For a panacea I long for
Yet picking the wrong all the while
Getting a hurt and 
Getting a pain
Struggling in strain and
Falling in vain,
Getting a stain… but,
When the choice is right
The decision seems wise
When the thought flows smooth
Actions become bright.




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CongoNetherland commented on I FOUND YOU

06-13-2010

Very cool poem. I agree with Corey on the distances diminish issue, but that is a small fix. I like the way this speaks about something and someone so personal and that there is a sort of sexual undertone that is so true - - you can peek into all the nooks and crannies and not find the smooth transition that is what you were hoping for in the first place - a harbor for the soul, a baby girl, a family - but when they come it is as natural as gravity. At least, that's what I took from it . .

poetheart87 commented on I FOUND YOU

06-05-2010

I hope you do become a famous poet. Your words flow smoothly, yet speak to the soul. I love your writing. keep on writing.

vincenzo

06/08/2010

Amen. Thanks for noticing. Thanks once more. And I won't stop writing.... Vin

MootPoint commented on I FOUND YOU

05-27-2010

Nice. I like this one. It does flow nicely. :)

ListninEar commented on I FOUND YOU

05-25-2010

I like the way the repetitive stanza parts made it flow and they fit so nicely. I like that it just flowed from you in a moment and was not overly thought out. The word ferriting was awesome, gave a great image. Love the pic of the baby (your son, I presume?)

vincenzo

05/26/2010

the pix is that of my daughter - OLUWATENIOLAFUNMI, that must be a tongue twister for you! It means "God has laid the mat of wealth for me to walk on". Thanx for your comments.

gogant commented on I FOUND YOU

05-20-2010

How easy life would be without all the stumbling blocks that are put down before us.........the same with love.....why can't it be an easy path to that special one..........Very good Vin...................g

Poetry is finer and more philosophical than history; for poetry expresses the universal, and history only the particular.

Aristotle (384 BC-322 BC) Greek philosopher.

vincenzo’s Poems (12)

Title Comments
Title Comments
The gods must be crazy (1) 4
I FOUND YOU 7
THE WORLD HAS ITS RULES 7
EPOCH 2
RELICS OF MY LIFE 6
MY FOE 3
SAINT S 3
ERU!!! 2
THE PRISON IS OPEN TO US ALL 4
VALLEY OF DEATH 6
WHO KNOWS TOMORROW 1
RENDEZVOUS (for My Uncommon Love) 3