What I see

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    What I see
    I know some days
    you don’t feel pretty
    I just think
    you’re being silly
    I see the beauty
    you have in and outside
    I heard you that night
    when you cried
    You are beautiful
    you make the heavens sing
    There is nothing I would change
    from your head to your toes
    to your cute button nose
    You are pretty
    so when you look
    in the mirror
    say it loud
    I am beautiful and proud

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    poetryrules commented on What I see

    11-24-2009

    Again, your rhyme scheme does not stay consistent. If you're gonna start one, it has to look like you broke it on purpose. I would encourage you to keep writing but try for a while to be consistent with the rhyme to a very strict degree, as a way to see and feel the rhythm in a poem. Or try free verse, which would suit this piece quite well.
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    PamelaALamppa commented on What I see

    10-13-2009

    Beautiful words to give that vote of confidence every budding woman needs to feel good about herself and learn that beautiful comes from within. Still - hearing it does make a woman smile. Lovely words. ~Pamela
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    dangedmanjr commented on What I see

    03-11-2009

    beautifully artistic, verbally and visually
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    Poetry comes nearer to vital truth than history.

    Plato (BC 427-BC 347) Greek philosopher.

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