" Rachell"

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this one is for my 1999 firebird formula..her name was Rachell and she will be sorely missed!!

" Rachell"

She waits for me, outside my door
her paint still gleaming, from the night before
Her dash is clean, and her fluids fresh
as she waits outside, still looks her best
 
Chrome tips are polished, the new tires wet
she's begging to run, you can surely bet
My keys in hand, as i leave the house
reaching for her, my heart does bounce

Open the door, and step inside
insert my key, to unlock the ride
Turn the key over, and she wakes up
a deep throaty growl, as she idles up

Push the clutch in, and slide into gear
sheer power is felt, from behind the wheel
Making a left, out onto the street
where the prey hides, for new is the meat

Not mustang or import, domestic or rice
shall stand a chance, she doesn't play nice
Out onto the highway, a mustang pulls up
I glance at the driver, his two fingers are up

As we slow down, to race from a roll
I cut off the music, now it's her show
Shifting back down, now into third
I pitty this mustang, and the rest of his herd

Three short blasts, come from his horn
the clutch pedal drops, a nightmare is born
Her RPM's climbing, exhaust screaming wail
her arms locked around me, we will not fail

The tractions a gift, as she sucks to the ground
pulling fourth gear, no mustang is found
Checking my rearview, there's headlights tho dim
a smile escapes me, the devlish grin

Turning on cruise, to relax in my seat
a good choice it was, to just let her eat
Taking the off ramp, and back to the house
my hands are still shaky, from the street racing joust

Pulling back in, the driveway once more
turn off the key and slowly close her door
out with the towel, a quick detail shine
one good wipe down, for this demon of mine.

Sgt Knight  IRAQ 2009-10
99 Firebird Formula a.k.a. Rachell



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sammia commented on " Rachell"

03-17-2010

Great write. You paint a vivid picture in my mind as I read this. Love the flow and the wording. Great job.

kage commented on " Rachell"

03-14-2010

great car poem i love the wording and the great story .................

kpeery09 commented on " Rachell"

03-14-2010

Very Nice, she sounded like a wonderful car, but best thing to do is to always have memories of the things you lose in life. Made a good poem and had a wonderful flow. I give you 10

Poetry is when an emotion has found its thought and the thought has found words.

Robert Frost (1875-1963) American Poet.

WrittenJustice’s Poems (23)

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" Camaro" 4
" TRANS AM" 1
" Rachell" 3
My old Friend 4
Collector of Souls 8
ANGEL FACE... 10
GUILTY... 6
SUFFER THE CHILDREN... 9
TRUTH TOLD... 5
PUSHED ASIDE... 2
LAYIN IT DOWN... 1
HATRED... 3
DAMNATION... 1
BLIND... 1
WINTER... 1
Betrayal 3
Manevolence 0
WAR.... 1
ALONE... 0
Love... 0
Love of Misfortune...
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0
SALVATION... 1
LIFE..... 0