a blinding eclipse

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    a blinding eclipse

    the world casts a shadow over my heart today
    a blinding eclipse of sorrow and woe
    tears bleed the color from my humbled eyes
    and i blink quickly so the pain wont show


    i touch my cheek and a stain appears on my skin
    transferring the color of painful memories
    the paralyzing thoughts of a final goodbye
    and the time since spent in disparity


    i contort my face and force myself to smile... and
    try shift my thoughts to a time of lesser grey
    when i could see a light cast in the dark
    and the mirrors reflection didnt see me this way


    the gleemless shadows of my sullen eyes
    stare lifelessly into a void of nothing
    life drips color into deadening thoughts
    to fight off the rush of reality


    the ever darkening hues of spinning dread
    swirl before my bewildered eyes
    the shadows move within the vortex
    and devour the colors from my mind


    wearily the day passes with impulses of desperation
    an eternity dies as the second hand unwinds
    lost within the shadows of the eclipsing sorrow
    i erode in slow motion with the flowing of time

     

     

     

     

     

     

     

     

     

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    Doshima commented on a blinding eclipse

    09-28-2010

    Life,eternity dying, nothingness and many more evolving into eclipsing sorrow -- all woven beautifully into this poem . a wonderful read.
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    Dano

    09/28/2010

    thank you very much for your kind words

    DeepEclipse commented on a blinding eclipse

    09-28-2010

    Potent wording Dano. You write well from the darker dimension of things. This is one of those pieces that expresses itself in such honest raw form that some may turn their head, afraid it may take their saftey away. I like how it faces it head on. It is what's felt. Why not express it as it is. Enjoyed the read.
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    Dano

    09/28/2010

    thanks so much for your encouraging words

    smoothdame commented on a blinding eclipse

    09-27-2010

    I liked the way you tied the poem with the darkness of an eclipse it made the words more real to me great job.
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    Dano

    09/27/2010

    thank you for taking the time to read an comment...

    Marsink commented on a blinding eclipse

    09-26-2010

    The title alone, is very compelling! I think you have eclipsed many who attempt to put such depth of despair into words! Applause building! The tempo of your phrases is excellent!
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    Dano

    09/27/2010

    thank you marsink... this is a high compliment coming from you and greatly appritiated

    Springsize commented on a blinding eclipse

    09-22-2010

    The day, as seen and felt by you is sadder than is fair... and you've used so many unusual and creative phrases, such as when the "mirrors reflections didn't see me this way" is so honest and "life drips color into the deadening thoughts" as if to bring the dead back to being... and "shadows devouring the colors" is oddly real... and you end the poem with the fear that it is permanent, unchangeable and painfully, fearfully existing ... almost, as if waiting .. for justice to be finished... although the "unwinding of the second hand" ---eroding in slow motion identifies a hell that Seems unending... and the dark breathes on, as if it were afraid the light would burn more than the fires of nightmares... and this is so hurtful to read, and relate to one's own failings... some, of which can be powerful and horrifically enduring...
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    Dano

    09/27/2010

    you always leave such insightful comments... your ability to break down and analyze other peoples thoughts with precision is fantastic... thank you

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    Allen Ginsberg (1926-1997) U.S. poet.

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