Broken

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    • Paige
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    Broken

     Look at me,
    see the beauty you once did.
    Watch my smile.
    Hear my laugh.

    Admire what I do,
    my voice with its soft tone.
    My body movement,
    my thoughts.

    Put your arms around me.
    Touch my smooth skin.
    Close your eyes when you kiss me.
    Hug me tight.

    Look into my hazel eyes
    as the light glistens off my tears.
    Talk to me like a friend.
    Love me like you use to.

    Make your honesty constant.
    Want to be with me.
    Try to see me.
    Stop breaking me.

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    bloomingsun commented on Broken

    11-17-2009

    This reminds me of some of my early poems, full of strong emotions and a desire to be known. Nice work!
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    BrittKun commented on Broken

    11-17-2009

    "on 09-21-2009 Someone with the talents as great as your should get the respect they deserve, if not you need to kick him to the curb. Sorry if I was a little harsh! Excellent job. " C MArsh I agree you will find that special someone that waiting is hard but it is worth it.!!! LOVE YOU FEELING IN THIS POEM!!!!! -(9)
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    Photojan12 commented on Broken

    09-22-2009

    You know who you are. Great writing. Even though it hurts, Keep growing and many will see the beauty in your writing and in your soul.
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    CMarsh commented on Broken

    09-21-2009

    Someone with the talents as great as your should get the respect they deserve, if not you need to kick him to the curb. Sorry if I was a little harsh! Excellent job.
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    DeepEclipse commented on Broken

    09-09-2009

    Hell yes demand respect. Shout your confidence. Know yourself. Demand to be earned. Challenge their eyes until they look away. I love the energy of this poem. It points to its own eyes and says -Here. Look right here-. Beautiful.
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    Poetry is either something that lives like fire inside you or else it is nothing, an empty formalized bore around which pedants can endlessly drone their notes and explanations.

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