Pretty & Perfect Makes me Pretty Nervous

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  • pocketofdreams6
  • If I speak in the tongues of men and angels, but have not love, I have become sounding brass or a tinkling symbol. And if I have prophecy and know all mysteries and all knowledge, and if I have all faith so as to remove mountains, but have not love, I am nothing. And if I dole out all my goods, and if I deliver my body that I may boast but have not love, nothing I am profited. Love is long suffering, love is kind, it is not jealous, love does not boast, it is not inflated. It is not discourt

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This is an older poem I wrote from about 5 years ago, although I decided to throw some better words and make it more of a final copy.  Hope you enjoy!

Pretty & Perfect Makes me Pretty Nervous

Yes your young and pretty, but mindless in the mirrors, your cries are interferred by stainless steel tears, you remain disguised behind a frame, a frequent number to your name, a cubicle in construction, I place blame on the deception of agenda you claim.

Shall I elaborate the crisis, Oh Christ must I say this, the zest you dislocated from my chest, what debrit you left, forthwirth my veins abscond, as you seem to loom here and there

I am the fish caught in your fish net stalkings, in an eyelet blinded from the sunshine, the leaves will lapse and I will imagine the colors on these black and white walls

One impure snowflake will grace my tongue, pneumonia has been planted within my less left lung, lost between the seasons I write these exaggerations during the spring time

I am the slave making minimum wage, lashes blistered deep amongst my back, the matches I lack to light the candle for your never ending rave.

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soulwriter commented on Pretty & Perfect Makes me Pretty Nervous

07-14-2009

I like your powerful prose - there is a steeliness, leaving acid taste upon the readers tongue, wanting to be cleansed and also wanting more. This an allegory that is open for many interpretations. I would enjoy knowing your inspiration and feelings directed to the disposition of the composition. Write on Write ON!

pocketofdreams6

07/14/2009

I actually wrote this about this girl I used to be obsessed with online like 6 years ago after she completely began ignoring me for no reason, and acting stuck up... haha... But since I wrote it, and I have grown as a writer I made slight improvisions.

AmadeusEx commented on Pretty & Perfect Makes me Pretty Nervous

07-13-2009

so fucking cool, the lyrical and disturbing images you come up with give me chills sometimes, awesome job, one of my favorites of yours

A poem begins as a lump in the throat, a sense of wrong, a homesickness, a lovesickness. It finds the thought and the thought finds the words.

Robert Frost (1875-1963) American Poet.

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