See You Soon

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    This is a poem I wrote a few weeks ago. Yes, it's a tad cliche, but it's just a short and sweet poem, that didn't take too long to write. Enjoy :)

    See You Soon

    If I could be shattered in your arms, I'd be okay.
    If I could cry and look into your eyes, I'd be strong.
    If I could scream at you against your peace, I'd be left with nothing to say. 
    If I could fly with you lifting me higher, I'd sing the birds song.

    If I could write of life, I'd make poetry of our story.
    If I could be in two places at once, I'd rather be with you than be here.
    If I could've been given more time, I would'nt let you be sorry.
    If I could be a hero, I'd save your bad day for the when I am near.
     
    If I could feel all your pain just to understand, you know I would.
    If I could play a song, I'd sing it for you beside the moon.
    If I could hold your heart, I'd keep it strong as I should.
    And if you'll ask me to fall in love, I'll see you soon.

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    Chaos128 commented on See You Soon

    12-09-2010

    I’d never call it cliché. It’s an ideal description of an idyllic vision. And no one besides you could have put it in just this way.
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    TonyZeski commented on See You Soon

    10-26-2010

    This is a very nice poem. It's light and not in your face with its message of love and the ending adds a powerful punctuation of the message without changing the overall tone.
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    kdarcy commented on See You Soon

    10-21-2010

    A nice piece sure to please most anyone, light, soft, holding emotion just right ... who wouldn't love to speak this to someone, or at least think it? Great, be wll k
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