Semi-comatose

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Semi-comatose

Semi-comatose, here I lay half conscious
Ravenous, I can no longer feel myself turn over around under
Erebus surrounds me like a dreadful dire gorge, a maelstrom waiting to engulf my faded body
Stoic, I fall into oblivion, peace washing over my face
Into the niches of my brain, where none dare go, darkness fills
What once was ambrosial, now seems to suffocate me from the inside out
A flaming vessel of hatred, or love
I can no longer tell
Death plagues my thoughts
Grieving is futile
I can feel my severed heartstrings hanging lifeless inside my chest
I am despondent, there’s no point to hope
What once I fawned at, I now dread
Blood mixed with salt drip down my face
This infection has become intradermal
It’s spreading, taking over my whole being
My sanity seems to abate with every tick of the clock
I’ve become skeptical of my surroundings, my so said brethren
Some wise man said the only beauty is that of destruction
I see neither
Semi-comatose
I am numb
I am dead

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Ydorj commented on Semi-comatose

10-09-2009

This is very, very good work. I can't wait to read more of your stuff. Incidentally. I bet your quite the sketch artist or painter as well. If not I'm sure you could be. Salute!

AbysmalGoddess commented on Semi-comatose

06-29-2009

Beautiful expression! Amazing feeling, outstanding emotion, marvelous use of vocabulary, and what a phenomenal manipulation of words to paint the picture of your message! Everything about it is so gorgeous...this one hits home harder than anything else in the world. This is going into my favorites and I declare it a 10!

Trailmixed commented on Semi-comatose

03-12-2009

I loved the twist of emotion and how it engulfs the reaction of understanding. Lost, as mixed as a drunk, you want to fail, but don't give in to those those who view authority as truth rather than truth as the authority and accept nothing but money in exchange for luxuries.

If I feel physically as if the top of my head were taken off, I know that is poetry.

Emily Dickinson (1830-1886) American poet.

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