Trapped (Thanks for the title, Chosen!!)
On the ground, barely breathing
Stranded here, no sense of feeling
Death can be so misleading
Children's smiles, the same as bleeding
Diseases bring me so much pleasure
My demise can be your treasure
Trapped (Thanks for the title, Chosen!!)
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Tags: Sadness
Poem Commentary
This was originally part of 'Love me, cancer', but it didn't make any sense, other than the crappy state of writing it was, so I just split it into a new poem. And if anyone could help me with a title, I would be BEYOND pleased because I couldn't think of one, nor did I really care.On the ground, barely breathing
Stranded here, no sense of feeling
Death can be so misleading
Children's smiles, the same as bleeding
Diseases bring me so much pleasure
My demise can be your treasure
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chosen commented on Trapped (Thanks for the title, Chosen!!)
06-30-2009
- Trapped, makes sense to me and of course I read several times
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