Not a Raid, Juat a Massacre

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    Well, this one is really old as well, about a year, but it still reflects my asspiration to be a horror writer.
    I really don't like the flow of it, but I just like the idea. And, of course, it has a Slayer refereance, one of my favorite bands EVER.

    Not a Raid, Juat a Massacre

     Let us pretty up this scene with a blood-laced massacre
    Watching children scream for thier mums, a chilling grin on my face
    A glinting dagger in my hand
    And they said blood didn't have a taste!
    A thrilling rush washes over me
    What a funeral this will be!
    Dining on the flesh of victims
    This is a beautiful, lovely sight, but blood and guts is all YOU see
    Don't you fear, I'll make this fast
    Either way you'll never last
    Tearing bodies, limb from limb
    South of heaven! On a whim
    No worries love, it's no a RAID
    It's not a bullet, just a blade
    What a taste!
    What a smell!
    Someone whispers 'This is hell'

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    jademelissa74 commented on Not a Raid, Juat a Massacre

    07-05-2009

    Nice concept! I am impressed with the imagery. You are on the write path with the concept for horror writing. Good Job! If you enjoy this type of poetry, I have two, that are pretty dark and different. Great Job!
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    Poetry is either something that lives like fire inside you or else it is nothing, an empty formalized bore around which pedants can endlessly drone their notes and explanations.

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