How can I

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    How can I

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        No, my hands aren't tied,
    They are free, free to decide
    My thoughts wander all around
    scatterred that away they fly
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       Can I be more loving, but how?
    Should leave everything and be home?
    Just to be beside you tomorrow and now
    And not leave you a minute alone?
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       Can I be more caring?
    Call you day and night to check?
    Feel your temperature by the clock
    Or give you EENT tests?
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       Can I be more careful?
    Hold you like sand in my hands
    Be wary of not letting pieces of you
    Slide and fall to the ground
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       Can I be more visible?
    That you may see me when you dream
    A magnificent geenie in a bottle
    Or be your all adored King
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       Can I be more loyal?
    And think more of you each second?
    Now that everyone I know, see me
    As a person not to fool around
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       Can I be more sincere?
    I wish I know how
    All I know that my heart
    Writes this poem alound
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       Can I be more loving?
    Dear, I would really know how
    How can I love you more
    Now that you are my here, then, there,

    tomorrow,everywhere and now
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    July 9, 2010

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    ApaqRasgirl commented on How can I

    07-25-2010

    Oh this is such a sweet loving write, a terrific tribute to the one you love so dear, you wrote this so well and your words flowed very smoothly, and I liked how you used the questions as metaphors of what was coming next. great job. thanks for sharing love asha
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    sequelrio

    07/30/2010

    :) thanks much. It's for my wife and my one month old baby.

    Tigcateyes commented on How can I

    07-25-2010

    This is quite the contempative piece. It is easy for the reader to tell by the strong emotions that come roling out with the words, that there is someone you are very fond of. It is easy to read because the rhythm and flow are good. Just check you words and the spelling in a couple of places, other wise it is a real good poem. Keep writing and thanks for sharing this here with us. Blessed Be.
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    sequelrio

    07/30/2010

    Thanks!

    In science one tries to tell people, in such a way as to be understood by everyone, something that no one ever knew before. But in poetry, it's the exact opposite.

    Franz Kafka (1883-1924) Czech writer.

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