Illusion Gone

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    This poem is about my first experience in the real world and how I chose to deal with it.

    Illusion Gone

     In the beginning there was laughter,
    joy and adventure.
    Then reality set in, the mirage
    I had been shown became clear.
    I was meant to work 24/7 and
    never have time for myself.
    Told lie after lie and still
    expected to be happy.
    Ended my journey early but I
    now know how the real world works.
    I know now that this move was the
    best for me, it opened my eyes to
    the truth.
    I want all who believe in the
    company to think long and hard
    before they make the move,
    or should I say take the plunge.

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    WordSlinger commented on Illusion Gone

    11-04-2010

    Well it gets better, but you have to let it, life has many pits, just learn to walk around them, and all should be well, ty WS
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    smoothdame

    11/05/2010

    thank you for reading and responding to my poem

    JadedJezzabel commented on Illusion Gone

    11-03-2010

    the truth hurts sometimes...........nice write..........keep writing if only to purge
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    smoothdame

    11/05/2010

    thanks for the love and I will keep writing. thank you for taking the time to read and respond to my poem.

    ESSENCEOFLOVE commented on Illusion Gone

    11-01-2010

    To me, this poem is about growing from a child to and adult. As a child there is time for each and every and endeavor but as the aging process goes on with age comes responsibility and less time. Some choices we make can end our childhood early, then reality sets in because hindsight is 20/20. Great write. I loved it!...........E
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    smoothdame

    11/02/2010

    thank you for reading and responding to my poem. I was trying to write a journey piece in a new way.

    kdarcy commented on Illusion Gone

    11-01-2010

    Sounds like the reality of the streets, forced to sell yourself and be avaialble 24/7, before getting out. Deeper thought may find something else, be well k
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    smoothdame

    11/01/2010

    thank you for reading and responding to my poem.

    smoothdame commented on Illusion Gone

    10-29-2010

    I would like all who read this poem to give their first impression of this poem right off the top of their heads, don't think just write a response to it.
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    In science one tries to tell people, in such a way as to be understood by everyone, something that no one ever knew before. But in poetry, it's the exact opposite.

    Franz Kafka (1883-1924) Czech writer.

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