Fear me revisited

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    I hope this revision is a winner.

    Fear me revisited

     Murder on my mind
    goose bumps up and down your spine.
    Just need a target to pull the trigger
    eighth sense run amuck.
    Cat like reflexes stealthy exit
    blink and you will surely miss me.
    Don't have to stalk you, gotta have you
    always know exactly where to find you.
    Can't run, can't hide
    I know the inner workings of your mind.
    Shadowy nights, close quarters and
    always on alert.
    I am jealousy on fire you can't get rid of me.

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    Maxsbabyforever commented on Fear me revisited

    12-01-2010

    Holy.... Wow.. Good job giving me goosebumps.... :)
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    smoothdame

    12/01/2010

    I wanted to give the reader something to fear. Thank you for reading and responding to my poem. Would you read my new poem "All of me" and tell me what you think of it?

    arronpalmer commented on Fear me revisited

    11-13-2010

    Woah, this is chilling and heart-stoppingly thrilling. The way you build up the character's thoughts and anger, I feel like she is right behind me, breathing down my goose-bumped neck...
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    smoothdame

    11/15/2010

    That was what I wanted to do give the reader something to fear thanks for reading and responding to my poem.

    ESSENCEOFLOVE commented on Fear me revisited

    11-13-2010

    This is excellent. I got chills reading it. thank you for going back and revisiting it. Great write...........E
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    smoothdame

    11/15/2010

    Thank you for reading and responding to my poem.

    JadedJezzabel commented on Fear me revisited

    11-12-2010

    much much better girl..............best three words i've ever heard are ......edit.....flow.......edit.....you got it
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    smoothdame

    11/12/2010

    thank you i was inspired and I just went with it. thank you for reading and responding to my poem.

    PoeticBrit commented on Fear me revisited

    11-12-2010

    i really love this one... great write:) 10 from me
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    smoothdame

    11/12/2010

    Thank you I love this one to and I am very glad I revisited this poem there was truly something more there.

    Poetry is finer and more philosophical than history; for poetry expresses the universal, and history only the particular.

    Aristotle (384 BC-322 BC) Greek philosopher.

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