Not Letting Go

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  • blackrose95
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I have to dedicate this poem to MarionYost for giving me the inspiration with her poem "Mother". Just reading it inspired me to write this. So Marion, thank you for always commenting and raising my spirits.

Not Letting Go

I know someone has hurt you.

Somebody’s done the same to me too.

This is bad enough to deal with on its own,

But the fact that our parents left us alone,

That’s nearly unforgiveable.

They’re supposed to make this existence livable.

It’s like I’m in the ocean and I can’t swim.

I can feel myself sinking, my surroundings getting dim.

I’m trying to kick to the surface, but the current’s too strong,

I can tell I don’t have long.

Its so peaceful, so simple, so… I don’t know.

Contemplating just letting go.

My limbs are screaming out in pain.

I’m about to let the sea have its way , When I realize I have to remain.

Yeah this is easier, but to give up because of some stupid waves?

Hell no… there’s enough people crying over loved ones graves.

I’m gonna fight whether it be on sea or land.

I plan on feeling that sand.

When I finish, even if I don’t win, its going to be grand.

And no matter how sad I get, it’ll never be by my own hand.

                                                                                                                                                                                                          -Blackrose95

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MarionYost commented on Not Letting Go

02-19-2010

This is awesome, and thanks for the dedication. I'm glad I could inspire someone... Just goes to show that good can come from bad. Great flow, you have, in return inspired me. thanks again. Al the best -Marion-

heavensdaughter commented on Not Letting Go

02-19-2010

very powerfully written how sad the reality of it, cause it exist all the time, in lives all around us, parents are supose to guide, to teach, to love, and protect, ( my nieces are going threw this with thier mother) it sad and wrong and I love ur poem, can't wait to read more of ur stuff 10 from me.

blackrose95

02/26/2010

It is wrong but it happens. I'm just happy I got through it all alive and not too screwed up :) . Thanks for the comment, and tell your nieces to hang in there!

MalikPeterson commented on Not Letting Go

02-19-2010

I like how you went from contemplating suicide to refusing to take your own life. I like the fact that you went on such a profound journey in such a short period of time from the beginning to the end of this piece...sometimes that is hard to do. I hope you keep your desire to stay strong no matter how hard it gets. I shall grant you kudos for this one :)

blackrose95

02/26/2010

Sorry it took me so long to reply! I've just been super-busy. I actually had to dig into my past feelings to write this one. I haven't thought about suicide in 6 years. I was in a really bad place and I thought ending it all might be better. Then I thought about leaving my mom permanently and I just couldn't do it. Besides, why should end my life? Because I was doomed to have a butthead for a dad? Yeah right! Anyways thanks for the comment!

MalikPeterson

02/27/2010

You are welcome...don't forget me when you have a chance...stop by...you might like what you see...but I can't promise that lol :)

JaleesaSoco commented on Not Letting Go

02-19-2010

This poem is beautiful! You have an amazing way with words.

blackrose95

02/19/2010

Thank you so much!

If I feel physically as if the top of my head were taken off, I know that is poetry.

Emily Dickinson (1830-1886) American poet.

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