Rebelling Against Purgatory

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  • blackrose95
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I hope someone will understand this!

Rebelling Against Purgatory

Duel of broken souls

As bright as burning coals.

Fighting for their very lives.

Fighting for their husbands and wives.

Losing battles. Winning wars.

Yet Death stilll guards the doors.

Forgetting themselves. Forgetting their motivation.

Too many souls, won't open for a nation.

After years of fighting:

Constant clawing and biting.

Very few remain

And even those are barely sane.

But still Death locked the pearly gates.

Won't open 'till he gets an OK from the Fates.

So they keep on dueling

Desperation is their fueling.

Their innocence gone,

Yet they keep pushing on.

Still rebelling against purgatory.

Still the battlefield's all bloody and gory.

Banging on Heaven's Door

And still Death's mouth wants more.

                                                                  -Blackrose95

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MalikPeterson commented on Rebelling Against Purgatory

04-15-2010

It's like a perfect little metaphor for the bloodlust of we humans with our wars and our chaos...all under the guise of fighting to pass on. Good show...bet you thought I wasn't coming huh? lol :)

blackrose95

05/02/2010

Very eloquent way of putting it, Malik. Thank you. I'm sorry it took so long to write back, my computer crashed a month ago.

MalikPeterson

05/03/2010

It's quite alright...computer problems are understandable on this end for sure lol. If you want to pay me a visit...I have some stuff :)

bluskyinthenite commented on Rebelling Against Purgatory

04-04-2010

wow....good write Death is always at our side ready to pounce at a drop of a dime. Live long a prosper. and a good morning to U

blackrose95

05/02/2010

Thank you! sorry it took so long to write back, my computer crashed.

Poetry is what is lost in translation.

Robert Frost (1875-1963) American Poet.

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