Scars

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    I had nightmares last night. My dad was torturing me. All of my worst fears became reality in that short period of time. It reminded me that beneath my love, my anger there is fear. Fear that he'll hurt me again, and I'm afraid if he does, If I let him, I won't make it the next time with all my marbles. He never physically abused me, but the verbal was enough.But no one believes me when I try to explain my past which is rare. Sometimes I wish pain could be seen, like the saying 'heart on my sleeve', like scars on skin. So people would know when you've been hurt, in any way. This poem explains that, I hope.I'm sorry for copying my message to you all onto my poetry commentary but there was nothing else to say. Please read on and give me your honest opionion, its greatly appreciated.

    Scars

    Scars.

    Raking across my skin

    Burns like tar

    Punishment for sins

    I did not commit

    Can barely see

    It’s dimly lit



    Longing to be free

    Ripping from my artificial chains

    Running from my past

    Wishing for a thousand paper cranes

    But the die have already been cast



    Want the pain to stop

    Pray for the ghost to quit its haunt

    To disappear like the black ops

    Its presence is daunting



    Nails scratching down my bare back

    Knives silvery tongues slithering across my open sores

    Recollections making me slowly crack

    Recalling blows crashing like ocean’s shores



    Invisible to the mirror

    Clear in mind

    Can’t forget the terror

    Everyone’s so blind

    Don’t know what they possess

    Until it’s gone

    People won’t obsess

    Don’t appreciate every dawn



    Want the scars to go away

    Yet I feel the footprints of my tears

    I know they’re here to stay

    The parasite of my closeted fears



    They are a physical reminder of what I went through

    A reminder I wish in my most morbid thoughts was true

    So that people could finally see …

    The real me.

                          Copyright ©2010 Ashley Sanchez

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    ArizonaPlay commented on Scars

    03-14-2011

    no need to wear your scars on your skin, you show them on paper instead...very powerful, from one victem to another.
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    BringMeBullets commented on Scars

    03-13-2011

    I have to be completely honest with you right now. I know exactly how you feel. My dad is an abuser as well. So I know how it feels to be yelled at. My dad never hit me much, but he did yell at me all the time. It sucks so much. I hate it. But I will tell you to be strong. It's so hard, I know. But the more he yells, the stronger you become. :) Great write.
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    dahlusion commented on Scars

    08-19-2010

    "Want the scars to go away Yet I feel the footprints of my tears I know they’re here to stay The parasite of my closeted fears"—superb poetic paragraph. bravo! peace and light, dah
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    Rhymer commented on Scars

    08-18-2010

    Excellent poem of the fears and nightmares of the abused. The disguises they are forced to wear. Know this subject very well. Peace and healing 10 from me.
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