Silent Echoes

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Late at night when all the world sleeps in a peaceful and blissful slumber my mind is left in the quiet of the eve with nothing but the echos of my silent sceams...

Silent Echoes

Corners of my cage

Anyone there,
Hello,
Helloo,
Hellooo,

As the silence is all that could be found,
The still of the night the only sound.

My mind free to roam,
Ravaging and plundering the land of the lost,
Forever seeking the light at any cost.

Yet all that could be found was the shadows of the eve,
Not even a glimpse of light would become my reprieve.

So here I lie in the corners of my cage,
My lonely heart begging the light to rage.

Silence my only friend,
The darkness of the night shall always send.

Goodnight to all the children of the night,
Goodnight till the shadows become light,
Evermore,
My heart begs to soar,
But as the cold blood of my heart becomes frozen by my will,
So in the shadows of the eve I lie petrified in a quiet still.

The quiet still

The Quiet still of the silence left not even a whisper to be found,
Nothing but the dead of the night was the sound.

The children of the night are out of their cage,
Plundering the innocence of the land with a rage.

Forever shall the silence remain,
For the inner beast can never be tame.

Running wild into the darkness of the night,
Forever hiding in the shadows of the light,
Lies my bleeding heart,
So still that not a pin drop of noise can be heard,
Only the eternal dead silence that never departs.

Dead Silence

Dead as the eternal night,
Such a silence brings terror, to my heart and soul,
As the quiet sets in once more.

So my heart lies frozen in a prison of time,
Agonizing in fear,
As the silent screams find me near,
Falling only upon deaf ears and ignorant hearts.

As the silence fills the air,
With nothing but the darkness of the night,
So my soul slowly disappears,
Into the abyss once more,
Till nothing remains but the silence,
evermore…

Silence Evermore

Out of the silence of the night,
Whispers echoed into the halls of light.
As the voices run like children in my mind,
Hollow screams of torment be sublime.

Silent cries disappear into the recesses of the wind,
Lonely hearts shivering in the frozen lake,
Never realizing they are drowning for love's sake.

Silence the only emotion around,
The echoes of my mind the only sound.

Forever longing into the shadows of the eve,
Forever longing for just a hint of reprieve,
Yet the noose tightens around my neck,
The chaos of my mind an utter wreck.

Thoughts running endlessly here and there,
Nothing remains but loneliness of the silence can I bare.

Goodnight to the children of the night,
Goodnight till the time comes to rage upon the light,
Silence evermore,
My lonely heart begging to soar.

Can anyone hear the silent screams of his torment?
Can anyone see the angel being crucified upon the night??
Can anyone find the fallen angel of the darkness???

Please hear me!
Pleasee see me!!
Pleaseee find me!!!

 

 

 

 

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RHPeat commented on Silent Echoes

12-16-2010

I alway have to ask why so wordy. I like the fact that you broke the structure up into sub-groups. That works well. The cliche's make it sound a bit corny in places. Rewording cliche's in your own words make the images you are addressing a bit stronger. The images that are used so much to say the same thing don't offer a reader something new at all. Maybe there is a better way to say the same thing without all the old images. Instead of going for the thrill words or images, maybe undercut the intent with the unexpected image in stark contrast/ go soft, smooth or indifferent to play against the hard core images in thought. It might give you a bit more thought in the old rhymes but it might make a stronger poem as well. a poet friend// RH Peat

angel33614

12/27/2010

well Professor peat, the reason way it was so wordy is because it was never intended as one poem, I actually wrote these poems as a seris of seperate poems over a period of a week or two, when I was done I just thought they were all so closely related that they would better fit together as one poem, I think it created a unique format but yes the mood, tone, and general theme is basically the same, that is why I put it all together. I know I could have cut and condensed it much more, just always seem to have trouble with this point, hate re-writting. I know that cutting and tweaking the poem makes it more condense and formatted, creates a better structure, and makes it more publishable but I think that when you cut a poem into little pieces and then try to paste it back together with superglue it just never seems the same poem, it often loses something in the translation, often the very essence of what made the original poem. Just my two cents, I know this is a point we will never agree on, sa la vie... Thanks so much for reading and commenting as it is always grealty appreciated and welcomed! Purity of the soul, journey well!!! with grace and humility ANGEL

RHPeat

12/27/2010

Yes gluing never works. Each poem needs it separate epiphany on a common theme. Then they will work. I thought the best part of this was the separations however. They allowed the reader to move through the piece at an easier pace. A poet friend// RH Peat

Tempy commented on Silent Echoes

10-25-2010

STRAIGHT away I was in the mode of pink flloyd, that was great

BlackButterfly1 commented on Silent Echoes

10-24-2010

The silence of the night can sometimes serve as our friend but in this case i think it serves more as an enemy. Great write Angel.

angel33614

10/24/2010

So much truth in the statement as you have a keen insight, very often our greatest enemy can be found within. They say there is often a fine line between friendship and enemies, the silence of the night has been both at different times in my life. Thank you again for you comment as they are always greatly appreciated and always welcome with open arms and heart! Puriity of the soul, journey well!!! with grace and humility ANGEL- POB for life! aka A blind man walking...

Zenwitchfaery commented on Silent Echoes

10-14-2010

Wow Angel I felt like I was reading a story -of darkness , into the Abess and yes even the fallen Angels can be heard, that was an exdellent write!

angel33614

10/15/2010

Glad you enjoyed and could relate, thank you so much for taking the time to read and comment, as always it is greatly appreciated and welcome! As for the abyss and fallen angel, those are other actually other poems, lol. Purity of the soul, journey well!!! with grace and humility ANGEL- POB for life! aka A blind man walking...

stellar commented on Silent Echoes

10-14-2010

You perfectly capture that emotion and that haunting atmosphere...I can't say more..It's just perfect...^_^ v

angel33614

10/15/2010

Not sure of anything I write is ever perfrect but I am humbled and honored by such a generous comments. This piece was actually more of a random collection of my innermost thoughts, my way of cleaning out the cob webs, LOL. Thank you so much for your kind review and comments, they are always greatly apperciated and welcome! Purity of the soul, journey well!!! with grace and humility ANGEL- POB for life! aka A blind man walking...

To have great poets there must be great audiences too.

Walt Whitman, American Poet (1819-1892)

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