the land of Nod (part 2)

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the second part of a story the third part will follow soon, please let me know what you think. it is a work in progress. and suggestions or feedback would be great.

the land of Nod (part 2)

I walked along the river road, through the dusty way, it lead me to a city
so close, but so far away
its gate was like a cathidrel, it stretched into the sky
with flags waving in the wind
and vines climbing high

upon the golden arches, stood banners in there post
inarm's of the guard mean who's gaze looked rather hard.

I wondered through the door way
my jaw dropped in dismay
the most beautiful city, like a fairytale in real play

as I walked into the city
the crowd was thick as leaves
there came a man a creeping
a king amoung theifs

he stopped by the baker's shop
I followed his gaze
for my eyes held a suprise, a remarkable display
but then the forceful crowd pushed me like a river another way

it was then I saw him
upon a golden chair set
a king upon his throne
a crown upon his head

but I knew it couldn't be real
so I pushed on through the trog
and carried on deeper into the land of nod. 

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BrokenHeart2009 commented on the land of Nod (part 2)

01-10-2011

I like how you take the reader to a different time and place. How the imagery because so life like in your poetry.

Tarlton009

05/02/2011

thank you, it is a work in progress.

Poetry is either something that lives like fire inside you or else it is nothing, an empty formalized bore around which pedants can endlessly drone their notes and explanations.

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