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  • is currently in that state a lot of people call "feels like heaven" <3

Embedded

One hundred people,
Witness one thousand sins,
Which offer one million chances,
To make amends,
Of which half are taken, and half are left,
Leaving the second half’s victims unable to comprehend

 A child,
A truth, a virtue, a deed,
A reason, a future,
The hands that sew the seed
In soil so diverse,
Which can be altered by any one factor,
A clear view of up,
Is valued long after

 Bold eyes stare
Through lit windows which glare
Into a heart so it seems,
But value is meant to be
In the eye of the beholder, someone said,
But tell me,
What hides in the eye, of one who is dead?

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ColdasIce commented on Embedded

03-05-2010

A good piece of work, I followed up until the end. All of us have our on believes and disbelieves. I look forward to more of your words.

danmartyjake1 commented on Embedded

12-12-2009

Strong and powerful words were chosen to concoct these emotional responses from the reader and it was enjoyable... The ending a bit of a cliff.......... Good prose and well deserved 10!

lucindaclaire commented on Embedded

12-11-2009

Damn, you're good! I hope your teachers,parents, friends realize how gifted you are.

Legos12

12/11/2009

Aw, thanks so much! I've had a few poems published, so yea, I do get recognized :). haha, but I hate it when my stuff gets published and then the book it's in is like $60. Six of my poems have been published and i have one of the books, cuz it was kind of cheap.

redbloodink commented on Embedded

11-28-2009

wow such deep words this writing is amazing great job!!!!!!

dumplin commented on Embedded

11-19-2009

I agree with rygar's comment. He hit the nail on the head and so did you with this piece.

Poetry is not a turning loose of emotion, but an escape from emotion.

T. S. Eliot (1888-1965) American-English poet and playwright.

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