Hiaku

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    Haiku i made in Writing class

    Hiaku

    Baby sister walks
    Off ballance and slow she goes
    stumbling every step

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    spbsdude commented on Hiaku

    12-13-2010

    How true it is when they take that first step and what a precious moment to catch in words so aptly put. A very nice Haiku.
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    angelchaser commented on Hiaku

    12-10-2010

    I LOVE haiku's, I've written over 200 of them and this one is good, I love it:)
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    Poetry is not the expression of personality but an escape from personality.

    T. S. Eliot (1888-1965) American-English poet and playwright.

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