breaking

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breaking

drawn... to the water
where stones are known
to speak
with silent affirmations
for answers we would seek

a cloak of diamonds flashing
above the sweeping deep
delays us
in adventuring too far
beyond the Keep

the kingdom's hollow echo
simply shivers in reply
we cannot see
the mural vast
just pieces to apply

singled out for searching
through the shifting shade
for a splash
to illuminate our notion
dusting sorrows off like ash

our desire to settle
on freedom, truth and love
invents a purpose
for our day
directed from above

content to watch progressions
of waves as they break
on the shore
spraying mercies on us
in forgiveness once more

MLS
August 2009

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JadedJezzabel commented on breaking

09-20-2010

the kingdom's hollow echo simply shivers in reply we cannot see the mural vast just pieces to apply now this is poetry.

bloomingsun

09/20/2010

Thanks, your comment is much appreciated. Come back anytime!

SavVySam commented on breaking

08-05-2010

I missed this most excellent work...the past few months have given me a new awareness and appreciation for refinement in the crafting of a poem...You really have amazing talent...I hope that this piece is read and re-read, for it offers much!;)

bloomingsun

08/05/2010

Thank you, Sam, it's great to hear from you. I am grateful for the read and the comment, especially as this is one of my personal favorites... TY ~peace

knight4696 commented on breaking

11-12-2009

Another very nice poem/ You certainly have a way of transporting the reader to a peaceful state of being. Your words are very calming and spiritual. I have a poem called ... The Awakening that I think you might enjoy. Check it out, if you will! Great Job! Ken

bloomingsun

11/12/2009

Thank you, much appreciated! I will check out your suggestion next.

Marsink commented on breaking

11-11-2009

Excellent in meter and a cadence that carries one along this path of discovery of your insights. Thank you for this work to bless

bloomingsun

11/11/2009

I am so glad you enjoyed it. I was concerned that this one would only make sense to me. It's nice to know I'm not alone!

torimode commented on breaking

08-20-2009

I really enjoyed this poem. The first few lines are very captivating. "Our desire to settle on freedom, truth and love." You hit the nail on the head. Those are the absolutes that we should be embracing. Torimode.

bloomingsun

11/11/2009

Thanks so much for commenting. Sorry it took me awhile to reply. I am still getting the hang of this site. Glad you liked it!

Poetry comes nearer to vital truth than history.

Plato (BC 427-BC 347) Greek philosopher.

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