A Better Place

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  • Lost Love

    A Better Place
    I’m on my own
    Standing all alone.
    I’m sitting and thinking of you,
    But somehow I knew
    That you would not stay long;
    But I must remain strong.
    All the good times we had,
    They weren’t all that bad.
    We had so much fun;
    The two of us couldn’t be undone.
    Somewhere along the path we took
    A wrong turn that shook
    Our relationship to the ground,
    But as I stare at this mound
    I remember it all so well.
    The times we had were swell;
    All until that dreadful night
    When you let out a yell of fright.
    A car was on the wrong side,
    But I could not hide.
    The driver was drunk
    And in the seat you sunk.
    Why did it have to be you?
    I was one of the few
    That would have taken your spot.
    The man who did this should be shot.
    As I drop the flower on the mound,
    There is not a sound.
    I miss you so,
    But in a way I know
    That you’re in a better place.
    I hope you save me a space;
    I’ll be with you soon.
    As I stare at the moon,
    I feel the joy I once had
    When you and I were glad.
    We were together at last,
    But how you went so fast.
    Death I no longer fear,
    For I loved you so dear.

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    calijya commented on A Better Place

    11-07-2009

    that was really beautiful. i hope its not based on real events. u r very talented.
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    Keiko commented on A Better Place

    08-15-2009

    All I can say is great!!!! I have read I few of your poems now and you are really good. I do not even have a question about it you need to get published, there is no trying about it. You are that great.
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    keithrberryjr

    08/15/2009

    Thank You for your comment.I am actually in the process of trying to publish now.I have just been too busy to do so.

    Krystle commented on A Better Place

    08-06-2009

    Okay so I think that you are sooooo talented!! You need to try to get published!! These are amazing and are a lot different from the typical poems that are so much alike!!
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    minigirl695 commented on A Better Place

    08-06-2009

    Oh Keith, this is a fantastic poem. I felt the emotions that you put through in this poem. I'm sorry for the loss, I am. But this is a great poem. I love it. =) ~{@ Lia Cake @}~
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    keithrberryjr

    08/06/2009

    The thing that captures most people about this poem is that it didnt happen to me and I dont know anyone that had it happen to them.I created a situation and put myself into it.

    Perianpoint commented on A Better Place

    06-15-2009

    Deeply resonating! Insightful, revealing, and artfully written. I felt honored to have read your poem.
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    If I feel physically as if the top of my head were taken off, I know that is poetry.

    Emily Dickinson (1830-1886) American poet.

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