A Better Place (revised)

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    A Better Place (revised)

    I'm alone with no one here to guide me
    and help me be strong.
    A thought of you crosses my mind
    while I'm looking around my empty apartment.
    I think back to how it was before
    and how we had so many great times together.
    These memories I will hold onto forever.

    Along the path of life
    we took a wrong turn
    and it has knocked our relationship to the ground.
    As I stare at this mound
    these memories fill my head.
    The good ones bring a smile
    but the bad ones bring about tears.

    I think back to that night
    when you let out a yell of fright
    while we were driving down the road.
    A car was on the wrong side
    but I could not hide.
    The driver was drunk
    and we couldn't avoid him.
    The collision came
    and I remember it all so well.
    The busting glass
    and the clanking metal.
    The thought still makes me flinch.
    Why were you taken from me?
    I wish I could have taken you place.
    I hope the guy rots in jail for this.

    There is not a sound
    as I drop a rose on this mound.
    I now know you're in a better place.

    I think more and more
    about the great times we had
    trying to hold onto the good
    and let go of the bad.
    At one time we were happy together
    but now you're gone forever.

    I will be with you soon
    is all i can think of
    tonight as I stare at the moon.
    I can't go on without you
    because you were my life
    but now you're gone.
    Death I no longer fear
    for I loved you so dear.

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    am2anangel commented on A Better Place (revised)

    08-02-2009

    Very well written. You brought this poem to life with a sad unfortunate tale. At the beginning I thought it was simply a break up, the result of loss through an accident causing the seperation was a great emotional twist. Well done.

    Footprints2002 commented on A Better Place (revised)

    03-12-2009

    Very deep you can write for sure, brought a tear to my eye

    nakedtruth43 commented on A Better Place (revised)

    03-12-2009

    really amazing. I feel privlidged to have this available to me to read

    janna077 commented on A Better Place (revised)

    03-10-2009

    I really liked this poem. It has so much compassion.

    BrielleC commented on A Better Place (revised)

    03-05-2009

    Wow.. whoever you knew that experienced this...so painful I'm sure... you captured the memories and the flashbacks wonderfully..even if it didn't really occur, you made it real! Way to go!

    To have great poets there must be great audiences too.

    Walt Whitman, American Poet (1819-1892)

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