I want to say good-bye when you die

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    I want to say good-bye when you die

     I want to say good-bye when you die
    sorrowful tears shall be dry (or drier)

    I want to say good-bye when you die
    ugly scares might be easier to hide (never easy)

    I want to say good-bye when you die
    so I can stop forever asking you why (no answer)

    I want to say good-bye when you die
    to ease your pains and close your eyes......

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    wheelsal commented on I want to say good-bye when you die

    06-29-2009

    Your experiences are so sad. I don't know what is for you or some one else but you say it well......
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    susanthewinner

    06/29/2009

    Thanks for reading, Wheelsal, I hope to write some bright and happy poems to cheer you up. Sorry for jerking tears from you.

    writingislove commented on I want to say good-bye when you die

    06-28-2009

    This was great. I love the very last stanza of this poem. It has come to me so many times and I always feel more of a closing if I say good bye when one dies.
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    rossmangeles commented on I want to say good-bye when you die

    06-20-2009

    Simply realistic. Saying hello is easier said and with a smile, but to say good-bye alwasy brings pain and sorrows. Great job!
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    susanthewinner

    06/27/2009

    Thanks, rossmangeles,keep reading and writing. Sincerely, Susan

    hbenitez commented on I want to say good-bye when you die

    06-15-2009

    Brillant job! You were able to encapulate the horrific farewell we at times give to someone who is at their final stages in this life. Although I believe in reincarnation and reject the notion of death one can't help feel pain when one travels to another dimension.
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    susanthewinner

    06/27/2009

    Thanks for your kind words and valuable advise. Read on, many more to come. Sincerely, Susan

    Poetry is not the expression of personality but an escape from personality.

    T. S. Eliot (1888-1965) American-English poet and playwright.

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