the real me

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    the real me

     when you look close what do you see
    do you see a gorl or do you see
    the real me
    do you see some girl sorrounded by light
    or do you see a girl cast out by
    the shade of night
    baby what do you see
    do you see the real me the girl locked up inside
    hidden away in the darkest of
    night
    look at me close not with your
    eyes but with your soul
    and tell me wht you see inside of me

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    alb29oclfl commented on the real me

    06-12-2010

    this is one of your better writes, keep writing you will get better with each write
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    redbloodink commented on the real me

    04-03-2010

    this write had creativity.... the point of this is for them to tell you what they see.... But the real question who do you see?........ this write painted a glims of who you are tho.... great write..... type ossssss' we all have them...... 10 from me...... red
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    Musicmynded1 commented on the real me

    03-30-2010

    I don't want to comment about the poem,, i wanna say what i see inside you: I see a bright girl poet who writes beautifully whats locked up inside as well as what shes feeling at the moment, and she has a very unique way of saying things, different from most. You are able to paint small portraits of your soul with your words and they arn't confusing or jumbled with extra frills.... and if this is what is bread in NC it makes me love states like these, as they are distant galaxies to me... this my dear is what i see.
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    winterkou commented on the real me

    02-26-2010

    I like the analogy , I like how this poem is written, it talks about he real you. nice write.
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    Poetry is either something that lives like fire inside you or else it is nothing, an empty formalized bore around which pedants can endlessly drone their notes and explanations.

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