a boy and an elephant

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elephant is very very good

a boy and an elephant

A small boy and his moving behind an elephant

It is more than a year and half boy

Who cannot speak and express his view

Was standing at the gate of compound?

Where in four small houses are built in livings

Saw a big elephant moving along the road side

By its controller siting on its back

As the bells are hanging at the sides

Pronouncing voice of the bells very lovely

Making the attentions to others to come out

Of house and watch the elephant that is rare

To see once in a way on road sides

 

The boy was carried to hand of the controller

And it was alarming, a rare experience while

Coming down and the elephant spread water

From the trunk of it as a spray assumed a good

It was a quite a little later, the boy was not noticed

By his mother or others, as he started his way to go

Behind the elephant with gathered persons

 

Unknowing, the mother started crying as the boy not seen

And missing, all are searching here and there, at the end

Thinking he might have gone behind the elephant and as

This was reached an Amman temple where the festival is

Performed at the day resort

The boy has not his food nor can’t he speak to any one

As he was sitting at the door steps of the temple

 

The sound of the bells and the voice of the elephant

Has taken him like this and found him missing from

His family, luckily his father came home and searched

Here and there, at the last found him at the temple and brought him back home, small or big he was taken care very much

Not leaving apart like this – ayyan dj 

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EyesOfRain commented on a boy and an elephant

08-30-2012

I have read a few of your poems and I seem to get lost here and there as some of your wording was a bit off. Then I looked at your profile and I saw you are in India. I think your doing great with your English! When I filled in the little errors with the right term your poems are lovely and your heart shines through. Very good work. If you ever need any help with wording or anything feel free to message me. I hope you don't find my offer offensive, as I mean you no disrespect. I enjoyed this poem. Very nice.

ayyan

09/01/2012

I am very much thankful for your english knowledge. pls help me on this way of my writings- regards ayyandj

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