D011 Be first to fire

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Poem Commentary

My middle line went 8 feet long (am I saying that right?)... I had 8 syllables. So, I had to take one out of the first or third line. It's still a Haiku (17 syllables... the Japanese put all 17 on ONE line).

D011 Be first to fire


 

D011 Be first to fire

 

new scene challenge...

note. I will adapt as always

Live! Come thrive with me!

 

-EinStud

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Jacqueline51712 commented on D011 Be first to fire

02-10-2011

I thought Haiku has 14 lines right? Not 17 because 17th of May is my birthday...

Poetry is what is lost in translation.

Robert Frost (1875-1963) American Poet.

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