CLAWING

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    CLAWING
    I’m clawing my way up by fingernails
    Knowing if my train derails
    I’ll plummet to a depth so deep
    That all I can do is weep
    Grabbing desperately onto branch or root
    With mud so slippery underfoot
    To hold on I try but still slip and slide
    Myself and the ground collide
    I tuck and roll just like I was taught
    A few more moments of life I’ve bought
    Bruised and broken I writhe in pain
    Stars and darkness engulf my brain
    Crawling crawling my strength it ebbs
    Not the spider I fear but its webs
    I’ve lost my way but I keep on going
    My heart beats faster instead of slowing
    I’m led by instinct it’s dark I’m blind
    I’m driven from deep within my mind
    One step forward then two steps back
    My mood went from blue to black
    My mind is like a treadmill on high
    All I can do is watch life pass by
    As I desperately dig my fingernails in
    Hoping this dreadful game I’ll win
    Though there is not another player
    I still fear the invisible slayer
    As I let out a primal wail
    I for a moment stop chasing my tail
    I realize from what I was running
    Was not a demon so cunning
    But if I’d open my eyes I’d see
    What I’m running from is only me












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    trocka7 commented on CLAWING

    07-06-2009

    I was rapt from start to finish! Loved all of it, especially the lines, "not the spider I fear but its webs" and "my mood went from blue to black". Thanks for sharing this, a great write and a great read....
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    Crush commented on CLAWING

    06-25-2009

    This is how to write poetry ; Full of emotion, wisdom and vision. Thank You.
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    organicchick

    06/25/2009

    Thank you!! I appreciate your interest. I really enjoyed writing this one. I will make my way through your words of wisdom when i get a few spare minutes!!!!

    Reallady65 commented on CLAWING

    06-07-2009

    Suspense, determination, struggle... challenges. Very well written. The ending is deep and unanticipated during the reading. At the end all I could say was, "WOW!" Keep you pen moving.
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    mdpoetgirl commented on CLAWING

    06-03-2009

    Poignant, thought-provoking, interest read. You have an awesome way with words, organicchick! I love the twist you put on the end - the one you're running from was yourself. At first, I thought you were indicating that you were running away maybe from life, or at least were drowning but fighting to survive life, something like that. But you took me by surprise when you ended it like you did, which made it much more entertaining since it wasn't predictable. Very nice one.
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    organicchick

    06/04/2009

    Thanks!! I try to be a little less than predictable in my writing......some is pretty typical but when i pull off something diff i like it! Anyway thanks for the interest!!!

    Chrisjan commented on CLAWING

    06-02-2009

    A very descriptive poem. The depth of feelings from your heart, that you achieve, is spectacular ! Each word is a step, forming lines, to Spiritual realm. Thank you for sharng.
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    organicchick

    06/02/2009

    I don't know where this one came from......I don't typically write dark poems but I guess the mood was right!!!!

    Poetry is finer and more philosophical than history; for poetry expresses the universal, and history only the particular.

    Aristotle (384 BC-322 BC) Greek philosopher.

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