Dancing Away From Me

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    Poem Commentary

    It has been a long time since I published on this site, but I found myself drawn back.

    Dancing Away From Me

    My first steps were slow,

    Unshore and faltering.

    You offered me a hand,

    Tied me to the ghost

    Of underplayed

    Masculinity.

     

    You were a 21st century

    Activist.

    Liberal gentleman,

    Utilitarian artisan.

    You were my very own

    Walking contradiction,

    And I was having

    The time of my life.

     

    You were never tender

    At the start

    You were detached,

    Full of life and love.

    You were a spirit out to see.

    And then I was your anchor.

    Unwanted shackles.

     

    I was the old and weary

    Wanderer.

    You were the aspiring

    Freedom-fighter.

     

    I think you want to give in

    Did; didn’t. Who the hell knows?

     

    We danced a sultry waltz

    A staccato flamenco,

    Our music was like wildfire.

     

    Then you made the mistake

    Of pausing and smelling

    The too sweet air.

     

    I danced on and you slowed.

    I tried to pull you too,

    But you looked back.

    Sighed.

    Remembered.

    Wandered away.

    You were lost.

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    poett commented on Dancing Away From Me

    02-07-2013

    Nice write I imagined in my mind a couple dancing a tango. Loved it...
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    Narrator

    02/15/2013

    Thank you :). I was imagining the same as I wrote, so I am glad what was a powerful image for me, came across to you too. Thanks again!

    jademelissa74 commented on Dancing Away From Me

    02-05-2013

    I love the way in which you manage to weave through reality and the "what ifs". You have a creative imagination. I enjoyed your writing.
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    Narrator

    02/15/2013

    Thank you again for commenting :). Sometimes separating the too becomes very tricky, but that is a the recipe for life the world over, wondering what could have been.

    dahlusion commented on Dancing Away From Me

    01-16-2013

    "Tied me to the ghost Of underplayed Masculinity"—poetically rich; creatively brilliant!
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    Narrator

    01/16/2013

    Thank you so much for stopping by dah, really appreciated, I am glad you enjoyed it :). All the best, Narrator.

    ginga commented on Dancing Away From Me

    01-15-2013

    A poem that celebrates a new found-couple no matter how attached or detached is certainly viable and provokes my interest.It seems opposites attract. ginga
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    Narrator

    01/15/2013

    Thank you so much for taking the time to read and comment. Indeed it does seem that two forces, seemingly wholly dissimilar, can be the perfect blend. Thanks again.

    A poem begins as a lump in the throat, a sense of wrong, a homesickness, a lovesickness. It finds the thought and the thought finds the words.

    Robert Frost (1875-1963) American Poet.

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