A Dream Lost at Sea

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  • travisd76
  • Been on a hiatus for awhile, but I'm back and have the itch to write some poetry.

A Dream Lost at Sea

last night I had a dream
it was a dark and dreary night
I'm not sure what it meant
so interpret as you like
I was out there all alone
walking on the beach
when I saw a woman drowning
but she was out of reach
I just couldn't get to her
though I tried as best I could
it appeared that she was clinging
to a little piece of wood
holding on for dear life
trying to stay afloat
as if that piece of driftwood
would be her rescue boat
But I knew it wouldn't hold her
so I offered her my hand
if only I could reach her
I’d pull her to the sand
I think at one point
our fingers even touched
but then this giant wave came
and to the wood she clutched
then I think there was a shark
or maybe just a fin
now if I was going to save her
I’d have to just jump in
I had to decide
there was no time to think
I had to make the jump
either that or watch her sink
but it was all for not
cause she stayed just out of reach
she kept on getting further
and further from the beach
she just kept going 
off into the night
and it wasn't very long
before she vanished out of sight

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Dreamer123 commented on A Dream Lost at Sea

07-05-2009

This poem seems sad but yet suspensful. In this poem your like the superhero coming to the rescue but you try to react fast to save the person. Great poem! :D

AmadeusEx commented on A Dream Lost at Sea

06-29-2009

nicely done, reminds me of how i write actually...you should look this dream up, see what i means to try and save a drowning woman

mistyparish commented on A Dream Lost at Sea

06-29-2009

Wow, this is very good it brings to mind a joke I know though. Very good write though. You get a 10 here.

jademelissa74 commented on A Dream Lost at Sea

06-28-2009

A strong methaporic content Travis. I really love the way the dream develops throughout the entire piece. It is very thought-provoking and you manage to reel in the reader. A very good read for me. Amazing portrayal. Great Job!

Heatherjwill commented on A Dream Lost at Sea

06-28-2009

This poem is why there are artist in the world I give this an A++++ excellent

travisd76

06/28/2009

Thank you so much... I don't know if I'm an artist or not, I just write what I see and feel.

Poetry is not a turning loose of emotion, but an escape from emotion.

T. S. Eliot (1888-1965) American-English poet and playwright.

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A Dream Lost at Sea 5
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Little Hands 2
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