Against the Current


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When we were driving, there was only one radio station available: Christian. I heard a song similar to this, so I put my own twist on it and ended up with this.

Against the Current

Treading water, head barely above surface.
the tide is coming in fast, ready to encompass;
to drag me to the bottom, drown me in my sorrows.
Ready to extinguish, ceasing my tomorrows.
Someone please help me, save me from this fate.
I'm not ready to go to Heaven, to see the pearly gates.
Not ready to admit defeat to this azure tidal pool;
hurry, before the current gets too strong and I will start to lose.
The fight for my life, the fight against an underwater snare.
Someone hurry and toss me a line, help me wake from this nightmare.
But no one wants to save me, I'm out on my own.
I'm forced to battle with the current alone.
The water envelopes me like a watery tomb,
I open my eyes to squint through the gloom
at the light of the sky, getting dimmer and dimmer.
I knew this would happen, I've never been a good swimmer.
I'm no match for the torrent beneath me
Though I scrabble blindly trying to get free
It's no use to fight, I finally surrender
yielding to the ocean's mercy and splendor.
The last thing I see before I die
is your face floating before me, all mocking and lies.

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InfinityKnott commented on Against the Current


Great write, very relatable. Just remember that we are all swimming beside you fighting the currents too. Don't ever give up.

Rose66 commented on Against the Current


loved this. had an awesome rhythm, which i really appreciate in a poem, along with the rhyming. great job :)

kpeery09 commented on Against the Current


Nice Nice, keep it up my awesome buddy. I give you a 10

Sydney commented on Against the Current


this is really good. i liked it. in my mind, i heard it as a kind of rap. im not sure why i did but i did. great poem. Sydney

ApaqRasgirl commented on Against the Current


oh wow, that was a terrific poem my friend, your emotions of pain and betrayal and the fight to survive are painted so well in your words that flowed smoothly till the end. great poem love asha

A poem begins as a lump in the throat, a sense of wrong, a homesickness, a lovesickness. It finds the thought and the thought finds the words.

Robert Frost (1875-1963) American Poet.

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