(((((((((( UNFOLDING )))))))) REVISED

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    (((((((((( UNFOLDING )))))))) REVISED

    To be worked on.....


    Just wathcing it unfold.....
    Listen to the screams......!!
    A story may be told.....
    Imagainary visions in the dreams!!!

    Thoughts of love constricting you....
    Wake... wake.... wake up brain!!!
    Feelings that are untrue....
    Always leaves you in pain.....

    Come around..., Think it through...
    Trust in yourself my friend....
    There is only one of you.....
    This remains past the end.....

    Lost in fear, doubt, and worry....
    Wake wake wake.... your brain.....
    Look all around and see.....
    Love is warm ... even in pouring cold rain..!


                                                                    So life is unfolding........
                                                                            Right before your eyes.......
                                                                           .................Imagrinary dreams.............
    Of before.........
                                                                                 Night mares and screems..........
                                                                                         Wake up brain.........
                                                                                              No-one believes............

                                                  Sleep at peace.........
                                            You wicked little dreams.............
                                                              Laughter keeps your tears.........

    At bay..................
                                                                   AND SILENCES the SCREEMS!

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    frazel5 commented on (((((((((( UNFOLDING )))))))) REVISED

    04-14-2010

    WOAH red this is incredible!!!! i liked it before, but omg this just brings it to a completely different level! Wow this was a truly magical poem and i can feel the emotion just pour out of this poem...an amazing write ~the fraz
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    Sydney commented on (((((((((( UNFOLDING )))))))) REVISED

    04-11-2010

    wow, this is really good. i like " So life is unfolding........ Right before your eyes......................Imagrinary" it rings true if no one is paying attention Sydney
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    redbloodink

    04/11/2010

    ty Sydney.......... Isn't it the greatest when you stop and look around....... red

    Mandi commented on (((((((((( UNFOLDING )))))))) REVISED

    04-11-2010

    Your poetry is like you.... UNUSUAL. UNFOLDING, ready to be reivised at any time. You are a creature of your own making and a creature of God. Bless this world we live in and bless you for being strong enough to be your own person.
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    redbloodink

    04/11/2010

    ty Mandi............... I apreciate your comment..... We all are blessed.......... Bless you my friend.... red.....

    MarionYost commented on (((((((((( UNFOLDING )))))))) REVISED

    04-05-2010

    This is awesome Red, Not sure I read that one before. I can relate. All the best -Marion-
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    redbloodink

    04/08/2010

    ty Marion......... A couple of people thought that the oringiinal could have been adjusted.... So I finnaly came up with some thing....... red

    If I feel physically as if the top of my head were taken off, I know that is poetry.

    Emily Dickinson (1830-1886) American poet.

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