A Silent Shot

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    A Silent Shot

    A silent shot in the night.....
    No-one heard....
    A life lost the fight......
    His story gets told....

    He worked all of his life.....
    Doing the best as he should....
    He loved his children and wife...
    Like no-one could.....

    He was losing it all.....
    The house, his mind..........
    He just wanted some one to take his call....
    But this he never did find.....

    You see, He was your cashier,cook, and so much more...
    He did what ever he had to, to make a living....
    He knew Gods love,
    He read His word....

    He just wondered if others knew this too.....
    He just was seeing his country going into dismay....
    He lost his job.......
    And couldn't find work to make some pay......

    To keep his house........
    And feed his family...............
    He tried and tried.......
    And wondered why no-one could see..........

    He thought to himself......
    Every-one must be blinded by satan.......
    Every-one but me.....
    What else can it be.......

    My neighbors are losing everything as well.....
    But our government has another story to tell....
    He thought some more......
    As he headed out the door.........

    He stopped to kiss his kids and wife....
    He told them I love you.....
    I'll be back.....
    God will take care of you!

    His family waited all night.....
    As their husband and father was gone.....
    But he lost the fight....

    He had a needle and a dark ally way......
    The shot was in his neck....
    He was dead before the next day....

    The cops shrugged their shoulders.....
    As they said, " well there is another junkie dead!"
    What they never saw or knew......
    This was just their hard working father.....
    One they never knew!

    But before he died......
    As he laid there high........
    He couldn't help but think......
    Of the millions of dollars his country spends.....
    To fight a war on drugs they can't win....

    Cause tonight there millions wont save his life.....
    He will never go back home....
    To his children and wife...

    So the janitor, the phone operator....
    He was once fit to be......
    He went back to his Creator.....
    And asked God, " Do you still love me?"

    Jesus answered with a sigh.....
    Of course I do my child!
    Then Jesus said to him....

    "The wickedness of man is always before me.........
    People lack with out cause........
    Mankind and what he thinks is right.....
    Is not My righteousness at all....."

    "I try to give........
    To all.....
    But mankind and the way they live...........
    Prevents this, My will........
    So your life came to call!"

    "I understand! "Jesus said to him......
    "You couldn't take their wickedness to-night.......
    So you took the needle.....
    And held it tight....."

    "You stuck it in you neck.......
    And hit the vain......
    Saying what the heck.......
    I feel my life was in-vain........."

    But my child I love you............
    And this you should know.....
    To me you were so true................
    But I know you wanted to go!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!"

    "Cause you didn't see My love any more........
    Cause mankind is selfish......
    And this I know for sure!"

    So Jesus wrapped him in His love,
    And wiped away his tears.....
    Then took him above.....
    And showed him all of  his happy years.......

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    killingP13 commented on A Silent Shot

    02-12-2011

    beautiful....the tears rolling down my cheek really shows you that your very talented thank you for such a great poem

    redbloodink

    02/12/2011

    well ty for the comment........... red

    Teardrops commented on A Silent Shot

    02-10-2011

    great write and a beautiful job expressing your feelings . It should make us all feel the deep pains of our fellow man loved it Marie

    redbloodink

    02/12/2011

    ty Tear for the comment always nice to hear from you..... red

    winterkou commented on A Silent Shot

    02-10-2011

    What a long beautuiful write expressing faith, and the struggle endured in life to make it. Jesus loves everyone and was looking out for his family only to know that that night the father would never return home. emotional write, love the story.

    redbloodink

    02/10/2011

    ty so much Winter for your thoughts and comments..... red

    sammia commented on A Silent Shot

    01-09-2011

    As I write this tears threaten to flow over through my eyes and in my heart. It seems that no one has the love for Jesus as we all should. You have painted a great picture to show that what mankind is doing to themselves. Great write I felt the emotions hit like a rock. Great flow....10 from me

    redbloodink

    02/12/2011

    ty Sammi for your comment.... red

    angel33614 commented on A Silent Shot

    01-03-2011

    the sadness and sorrow of this write fills my heart with an ocean of tears, this poem leaves me emotionally drained and near speachless, bravo my friend! This poem is so raw and pure, so real and believable, I think this is what makes it so sad and relateable. Not sure if this poem was mere fiction or wrote based off of reality but in truth it doesn't matter, because the real reality is this is the truth for many many more americans than we would like to admit. I know I havn't read all your poems, not by a mile as you have so many, but I dare to say this is one of your best to date I have read, it is surperb! Purity of the soul, journey well!!! with grace and humility ANGEL

    redbloodink

    01/05/2011

    Angel thank you my friend for these kind words...... The answer to your question about real or fiction... I agree that is a mute point with so many living this night mereish dream of becoming reality..... thank you for reading any of my writes..... and yes I have way to many writes........ and being a part of a few sites just makes me wounder how I have so much time to write when I do write........ red

    Poetry is not the expression of personality but an escape from personality.

    T. S. Eliot (1888-1965) American-English poet and playwright.

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