I once was

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    I have a friend that I care about and love..... I got it for her but I am not the one for her...... such is life...... This poem was written for her and she will never know......

    I once was

    As I live this life......
    I know it's not a dream.......
    But as the days go bye.....
    I wonder why I don't scream..............

    I fight to keep this flesh....
    In submition to God's Holy Spirit.....
    I try to walk my best....
    I put myself to the test.....

    Loving and careing about my friends I know.....
    Helping when I can.....
    It does crash down..............
    My emotions I try not to let show.....

    So I ask for help......
    I don't want to sink.....
    Down into myself.....
    The person I once use to be......


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    danmartyjake1 commented on I once was

    02-12-2011

    Brutally honest and reaching out, it seems that the poet is asking for something. To me, the reader, I want to reach back and say do not despair, hope is everywhere. Look at a flower, or the sky as birds fly. Give a smile to someone who has none and see what comes back. Bless You!

    redbloodink

    02/17/2011

    ty for the loving comment.... I was the poet... and I just smiled.... ty again........ red

    killingP13 commented on I once was

    02-12-2011

    life always seems to be a bully.....and with all bullies you have to stand up to them....

    Poetry is either something that lives like fire inside you or else it is nothing, an empty formalized bore around which pedants can endlessly drone their notes and explanations.

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