RANDOM

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This is a thought pattern, ......random..... Just started out with one..... I don't think my first ever hit the page....... I hope this poem takes you were ever you like as you red these words........

RANDOM

I came here with something to say....
I sat down and thought.....


I pondered and pondered....
My mind sure did wonder.....

From the first too the second....
To the third and fourth.....

I couldn't keep a straight thought....
I had to think a second longer....

What was that thought anyway?
Why did it fade.....

From my memmory.....
Why did it just....
Slip right away....

I thought again.....
With all my might......

I focused on nothing.....
In my own brain tonight......
Thought and thoughts.....
Just eludeing me.....

I may think it through....
Thinking is something I shouldn't do.....
I lose myself......
In the thoughts of you....

Sitting on the shore.....
On the beach alone.....
I thought some more......
The vision was shown.....

It was of you....
Unclear....., but true.....
And I was just thinking......
One thought......... 

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wamomo commented on RANDOM

12-19-2009

Very cool...I can relate to this...thinking and thinking and thinking..and somehow not remember what I was thinking, or not even sure...but you know there's a source.... ; ) You did a fantastic job of capturing one of those moments that just drives you mad...lol...great write, Red

redbloodink

01/31/2010

ty Wam...... I hope you are doing well..... I hope to see ya soon.......

HopeOhlarik commented on RANDOM

12-16-2009

well i thought i had already commented on this one, but I guess i was wrong. good write red, makes ya think =P

redbloodink

01/31/2010

ty Hope.... Love ya my friend.....

Zerabella commented on RANDOM

12-01-2009

You are so very expressive,and self assured.This is the first impression that you set off

redbloodink

12/01/2009

well ty ..... I keep working on this quality of myself....

RareNecessity commented on RANDOM

11-30-2009

Red, nice write. I know this place so well. You put a smile on my face and skip to the beat that keeps me writing. II love the last verse...one thought...how amazing its power. Peace and tenderness sent to you! Thank you! A.Angeline

redbloodink

01/31/2010

ty Angeline........ for your comments and reading my work..... blessings to ya,

Lydia commented on RANDOM

11-30-2009

wow that was powerful ,word well choosen . I hope one day you complete a book peace and have a Merry Christmas

redbloodink

01/31/2010

ty Lydia ... I'm not sure about a book.....

In science one tries to tell people, in such a way as to be understood by everyone, something that no one ever knew before. But in poetry, it's the exact opposite.

Franz Kafka (1883-1924) Czech writer.

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