Hell challenge

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    Hell challenge

    Welcome to hell
    with the toll of the bell
    thoughts of flames
    going insane
    inside my heart
    the ache does start
    towards heaven does rise
    to the other side
    stressing my mind
    trying so hard to unwind
    Welcome to hell
    my mind does tell
    the stories of old
    must be so bold
    Life is a merry go round
    for all of us earthly bound
    My mind is revolving
    as the wind is evolving
    into the darkness we shall see
    a brand new flame burning just for me
    Welcome to hell
    quit ringing that damn bell

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    PRober commented on Hell challenge

    06-29-2009

    lol... the hell you know is always less scary than the hell you don't? funny, and good job!

    wheelsal commented on Hell challenge

    06-20-2009

    Not bad for rhyming. Usually this ruins the flow. You can ring my bell as a poet. It is a good poem.

    dustyrebel70

    06/21/2009

    thank you

    BrielleC commented on Hell challenge

    06-18-2009

    I like how each line feeds off the other and the fluidity of it.. I'm usually a free verse type, but this has a great meter to it.

    Poetry is either something that lives like fire inside you or else it is nothing, an empty formalized bore around which pedants can endlessly drone their notes and explanations.

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