The Night

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This is a working progress. But I wanted to put it on here to hear what people think. So please feel free to leave a comment on what you think I could improve on. Sometimes we all need all the help we can get. Keep writing and keep smiling. Thanks

The Night

I'm running in circles and I don't know why
I'm loosing myself so I look to the sky

Stare at the sunset but not sure why
Close another day that has just flown by

But when the night arrives
with diamonds in the sky
that's when I find
some piece of mind

When the night arrives...

I look into the night at those stars that shine so bright
I'm so far away from city lights

That's when I can breathe, when the sun goes to bed
That's when I seem to clear my head

When the night arrives
with diamonds in the sky
that's when I find
some piece of mind

When the night arrives...
It clears my mind

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EyesOfRain commented on The Night

08-27-2012

This flows like a song and paints a picture of a restless soul finding it's satisfaction. I like the flow of the emotions. I don't see anything to improve on. To alter it might make it something else completely. Very enjoyable.

Worthless commented on The Night

08-01-2012

I wish i could say the same...

Poetry is what is lost in translation.

Robert Frost (1875-1963) American Poet.

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